CHAPTER 2 OF "Spending Mother's Day with Mrs. Parr" IS OUT NOW

Mines gonna be about them getting blackmailed and fucked by some music producer

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Sounds based (though I literally have no idea what this anime is) and I assume it fits the context.

Also, what should the thrust of chapter 3 be?

Anime is basically about them pursuing their music career. It takes place in the cowboy bebop universe. It’s on Netflix

Violet is terrible at sucking dick

>Violet is terrible at sucking dick

I actually like this idea. He gets nostalgic for what Helen did. Though I think the ending of chap 2 implies he'll still be messing with Helen and he doesn't care about being faithful to Violet

Helen teaches her to suck properly

Trying to think of a way Violet would be okay with it

Writing smut is a bit hard, but there’s like barely 3 explicit stories on archiveofourown for Carole and Tuesday and they’re all yuri.

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>Writing smut is a bit hard

Depends.

>but there’s like barely 3 explicit stories on archiveofourown for Carole and Tuesday and they’re all yuri.

This is the kind of thinking you need. I wrote a seven chapter Mortal Kombat 9 futa on male story because there were A)Not that many futa on male stories as is and B)Not a single futa on male MK story

Helen could mess with her and make her self conscious about it.

It’s hard making it not read like I’m describing a porn scene.

Also you're the third person in this thread - what did you think of the story in general?

But you should be - I think I do that, but let me know if I don't.

I like stories where the moms take the daughters boyfriends.

Based - but was it a good fap, did you like the writing and plot, etc

Lol yeah it was a good fap

Not sure if I should write the sex scene from the pov of the producer or the girls

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You could do both, check out Chapter 2 of my story Lawson Has His Fun as I did a threesome with a similar concept. Or you could have a focused approach. I wrote my OP story from the male perspective, but it's mainly because I think written porn lacks male perspective in general. The female perspective only could be used to reference a lot of the show or character stuff.

Just something I wrote not sure if I’ll go with it.
I know you used to do this back in Earth to get by. “Oh, really and what proof do you have”? She asked. “I am from there you know I do have a lot of connections plus I have this”. He pulled out his cell phone and tapped away at the screen on said screen was Carole clear as day with a cock in her mouth. She was stunned the guy who’s cock she held in her mouth had paid her extra for the pic. He begged and begged and promised her he would never share it. Carole was speechless Tuesday couldn’t find the words. Part of her felt bad at what Carole had to go through the other part felt kinda hot. She had never seen anything like it before. Even though it didn’t show much she could already tell just how much pleasure Carole was bringing to the man. So Carole what’s it gonna be? You suck me off and you get your album, I’ll even help get it to the top of the charts. If you don’t I’ll post that pic all over social media.

Rough and early obviously, and there's stuff you could add detail to (more detail IMO is never bad for porn.). There's a lot of ways you could do it, but I generally write the skeleton (not full parts, but just little ideas or descriptions that pop into my head like the ending or a scene or something I want to describe), then I go back to it when necessary.

What sort of detail?

Basic stuff like the look on her face while sucking the dick (was she content or frustrated? things like that) or the dicks size and how it contrasts with the size of her face. Or even her commenting on the experience in her head. Even the guy could think about how it looks depending on what you do. I don't want to say too much more - stuff like this should come naturally, though if this is your first time I know it can be difficult.

Ah yeah I have a basic idea for that part was thinking of doing a small flashback for context not too sure though.

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>Spending Mother's Day with Mrs. Parr

Amateur writer here:

Not badly written, but TimedWatcher uses a lot of adverbs. Also, the story might be better with shorter sentences.

I suggest he/she use the Hemingway Editor to get those under control.

>Also, the story might be better with shorter sentences.

Give me an example.

he is a very short boy
he be short

>he be short

I'd rather not write like this.

youree gay

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