Cred ForumsCo/'s Bizarre Adventure: New OP edition

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Nice revision of the OP.

So, Vicky. Is she acting under her own power the whole fight, or does Joy mind control her at some point?

well, Vicky is a butcher, there is no need for Joy to goad her into fight, maybe to avoid getting killed by her.

You did good with the OP. Nice job. Will get the last thread to archive in a bit.

Under her own power until Joy betrays and mind controls her at the end.

The plan is for Joy to just nudge her in the direction she wants her to go in.

Dunno what will happen during the fight yet, but I've already arranged for Dora and Susie to be on their own when Vicky comes barreling in like a bull with chainsaws for horns.

bump

Vicky will need to do something for Joy to really try that.

Like how Vicky will wonder, even with Joy inserted in all of her memories, why she has never once killed her before.

That makes sense, Vicky may also start to wonder why she is so fixated on the group when she is surrounded by potential victims.

>Vicky will need to do something for Joy to really try that.
Didn't we say last thread that she was going to abuse Joy?

I mean do something that will force Joy into doing that.

They're in PI, people don't stay dead in PI, Joy knows this, she wouldn't care about taking some abuse since she can always slip away later using her ability.

I meant verbal abuse. I also doubt that she would be able to take a lot of shit from Vicky before getting a little mad.

You mean, some grudge for Joy to attack Vicky? If so, I don't think Joy really cares about grudges as much as just enjoying others' suffering. Though Vicky's abuse may be a good push actually.

Also, considering Joy's power makes her able to store emotion-filled memories of Sadness (aka as the emotion of love), I think there's a point where someone is so twisted by [Sweet Emotion] that its emotions and codependence for Joy are irrepairable even after they accept it was all a lie. I know Vicky can't possibly reach this point now, but if she's weakened enough, maybe Joy can make she regress to be suddently needy, childish and submissive, which is what I expect Vicky to be once Joy fully attacks her with her Stand.

Some user said that at one point, Vicky should punch Joy so hard, she is left with a gap in her teeth (maybe letting her eerily identical to Warden, if that actually does happen).


Ideias for Waifu Ocean have been good so far, though we should focus a little on what Summer will do too. I just imagine her being really chill the whole time she's with Joy and Vicky.

Like an user said last thread, we should have her make a reference to those parasites that implant good memories about them.

Summer is getting physically abused the whole time.

She's used to it by now and just buffs Vicky when she gives the order.

Part of the fight will need to be separating her from Vicky. I have ideas for that involving steel beams and [Master of Puppets] but not in the way I think is totally expected.

The only thing that will get Joy attacking Vicky is when Vicky turns her attention on Joy instead of Dora.
That'd piss Joy off since her whole thing here is wanting to see Dora die.

Is the thread refusing to be bumped or is it just my internet connection?

Seems like connection errors, I've got 'em too.

Also, reading through Scud. So glad he's in part 7, between him, Sam, Max, and the Wacky Races gimmick, it's going to get fucking insane.

Yeah, Cred Forums was having problems.

Lack of progress on part 6 today brought to you by sleep deprivation and work.

I just finished reading through Scud today.
Dead Leaves came to mind when reading that, but Scud predates that.

Scud should be trying to kill someone during the race, but his orders are to kill that someone DURING the race, not between legs of it, meaning he could be on good terms with his target during those times.

(Race -> check point -> time spent at check point waiting for anyone else to arrive before the time limit is up and the next check point is announced -> race -> repeat)

Makes me think about a scene with everyone going fast and their cars end up racing on the top of a train before Scud air drops down onto a car saying "It's nothing personal, I just really need to kill you!" then Yellow Jacket unleashes a swarm of bees "No! Why was I programmed to feel pain?! Why?!"

Or another one in the robot town near the pit the Looniversity sunk into. It was made a checkpoint by President Nobody to get some economy going through the town. Scud gets an "Oh no, my home town." as the priest bot from Futurama comes rolling up, now the reverend for the Church of Deadlock and gets on Scud's case for his life choices. It should be Cybersix's home town too.

The town is under siege by Gatlocke (Generator Rex) who wants stand jawbreakers leading to a team up to defend the town.

Then they all go down to the Looniversity since they have time to kill before the next check point is announced. Scud and Gatlocke get into a fight over the arm corpse part down there.

Imagine Scud with the right arm of Superman, but he doesn't want it, but Gatlocke does since he wants a stand and someone has told him that the corpse parts grant stands.

And then Don Karnage shows up with the announcement of the next leg of the race and all racers board his airship. Gatlocke used to be his first mate, but wanted his own things.

Then it goes into Tulio's country.

Stand Name: 「NUMP」
User: Tito "Dickman" Dick

Primary Attack
Reality Distortion: NUMP causes reality to appear as though it had been messed around with by someone with Sony Vegas. Loud and random sounds, strange colors and effects and time repeating itself are all common occurrences. It is has infinite range due to the entirety of reality being under its control.

Destructive Power: N/A
Speed: B
Range: Infinite
Precision: N/A
Potential: B

Secondary Attack (「Shake It Like a Seizure」)
Shake It Like a Seizure gives everyone within range a fatal seizure, but also gives the user one as well.

Destructive Power: A
Speed: B
Range: D
Precision: E
Potential: B

Shit I forgot durability

「NUMP」
Durability: E

「Shake It Like a Seizure」
Durability: A

Should Dora and Susie be talking about anything in particular when Vicky strikes?

Wait, Joy STILL hasn't learned her lesson not to fuck with the gang even after she got beaten by them?

She got pushed off a cliff and then stopped by her own stand (it has an ability to repair mental damage to its user and acts on its own when it feels its user is getting too far gone) in a wrestling ring when she tried to pull a knife on them.

Neither of which were a "fight" so anons complained and this is what I've come up with in response to it.

Wouldn't it make more sense if Joy were to mind control Vicky into forcing her to attack the gang?

> 24 posts over 8 hours

maybe it's time to take these threads to +Cred Forums, eh?

>+Cred Forums
>not eightchan

>stand abilities
>permanent

And posting has gone down at least twice during that time.

I'm only going to keep writing for this if the threads are here on Cred Forums. I'm not going to others sites for this.

Nope, Vicky is like a gun. You point her in the direction you want to watch things die in.

Here's something, I would've liked to have gotten more typed up, but is seems anons are getting uppity.

I might need to change it a bit so it goes more smoothly from >Vicky is quickly approaching Dora and Susie
>Under one arm she has Summer, under the other she has Joy
>Joy’s face is bruised and it looks like her nose was bleeding until not too long ago
>Vicky holds Joy up to her face while still running “Which one?”
>Joy: “The… shorter one!”
>Vicky: “Goodbye fodder then!”
>Vicky’s stand manifests with a chain saw and swings at Susie, Dora pulls her out of the way just barely in time, but it still catches Susie’s arm, severing it, then the arm explodes into gibs
>She drops Summer and Joy and begins grinning sadistically
>Vicky then punches Susie right in the gut, multiple fist impacts are seen forming on her before she goes flying into the distance like a bullet
>Dora has [Boots] out and she’s alone as Vicky stands before her
>Vicky: “So you’re the twerpette who thinks she’s the top bitch just ‘cause she hasn’t died yet?”

Still a very much so work in progress.

>comfy graveyard over deserted landfill
lol you can fuck-off back there, if you want, pipsqk

>The damage the Stand left in the victim's brain somehow is reverted back
Joy's Stand is supposed to mess up the data of normal memories, user.

Not a good ideia

Joy still needs a proper retribution though.

>Then it goes into Tulio's country.
>"Bienvenido al Mundo de los Hombres Hermosos"

The girl got thrown into a cheese grater and just got her teeth knocked out. I feel that's punishment enough.

I plan for things to happen to her during the fight.

And for something to happen to her after the fight.

Like what? Got any examples?

And she still wants to have the gang's heads on a silver platter. I don't think that's punishment enough.

She basically tricks the top dog of PI into attacking the gang, and when said top dog realizes she's being used, Joy uses her stand to control her into attempting to wipe out the gang. One of the gang members knocks over Joy which int turn frees Vicky from her control, and then she lets the gang go because as much as she likes to kill the gang out of sheer joy (heh), she REALLY doesn't like being someone's bitch.

Susie comes back spotting a monster arm and shoves flesh down Joy's throat after Vicky is dealt with, then covers the rest of her body so she'll be stuck in a re-spawn loop for a while, unable to see or hear anything with only her own thoughts for company.

And that'll be the last we see of Joy.

Pericles takes on Summer, she buffs up after he tries to hold her down with steel beams, then she breaks the beams.
Pericles then stabs the beams into Summer's muscles like a second skeleton and begins trying to manipulate her that way, but Summer buffs up even more so she can brute force the magnetic control.

The idea is she buffs up too much and then her muscles explode, killing her for a while.

I need to actually get to it all in the writing first though, but if you have suggestions or complains, now would be a good time I suppose.

But if happens, that will never happen. So I guess Joy would just Hol Horse it out of there with Summer and sub Vicky when she realizes that she can't use Vicky's stand.

>Summer
Is she even relevant in this?

I was thinking that she had enough of Vicky's shit and decided to help Joy defeat her and take her over due to [Sweet Emotion]

>Dora says nothing
>Vicky: “Yeah, I’m gonna enjoy this!”
>She begins advancing on Dora, Vicky is holding an axe now and her stand still has a chainsaw
>Dora takes a quick glance in the direction her friends went, but Vicky isn’t giving her any time to think about a rescue, all Dora can do is dodge
>The axe comes down and hits the ground, making a much bigger impact than a weapon of that weight should
>Dora is dodging, ducking, and rolling the best she can, Vicky is laughing the whole time
>On the side lines Summer is sitting down, looking bored and apathetic while Joy is watching with eager anticipation, both hands clenched into fists and a smile beaming on her face
>Vicky goes in for another swing, but suddenly turns and starts off in a different direction
>Her grin turns to an expression of rage “What? Why can’t I control my legs?” She looks down and sees a twisting path of red footprints
>Dora: “Can you say ‘Soy una perra ciega’?”
>Vicky: “You bitch. So this is what your stand does? It’s pathetic!”
>Vicky’s stand is out and swinging wildly around her, but Dora is out of range, though still can’t attack with [Boots] because of it
>Vicky’s anger is mounting as she yells “Summer! Buff. Me. Up.”
>Summer finally begins to move and is glowing with stand power; her stand appears and looks like a very buff robo-ish man with spiky hair
>It flies over to Vicky and gives her something like a quick massage
>The effect is immediate as Vicky’s muscles become well defined; she’s /fit/ now instead of just normal, but not too /fit/
>Vicky’s stand also looks stronger now too; it takes its chain saw and swipes at the ground causing a wave of destruction all around its user, eliminating the ground the red footprints were on and freeing Vicky

I suppose this would be a good place for Joy-Summer interaction.
Any suggestions for what they should say to each other?

The dialogue from is good.

So sorry in advance for this not being related to the current part. But just wanted to drop off an update on a pic i was working on.

Got broad strokes (as far as colors) down. just need to do some additional shading and finalization stuff.

Things I was considering,
>Colors on the Poncho
The current look is basically Clint Eastwood style poncho meets Racing Checkerboard. But since part 7 is also the whacky races it made me wonder if I could change it from straight black and white to maybe pastel green, orange, red, blue from the whacky races logo. And if so, should the black checkers be replaced with the colors? or the white checkers in between be colored?

>Representation of Nameless world's abilities.
Its basically seeing the path of objects as they travel. So what i was contemplating was, should an object (like a bullet) be at the start of the line or in the middle of the arrow?

>Rectangular framing on the blue starred arms to complete the flag look.
Will be the end goal once i finish up on shading and coloring. Framing Hex with these lines that show off the stands ability and represent the general idea behind its appearence.

Is there anything else i should work on?

Needs something that comes before it with Joy being excited over what Summer's stand does.

Like a
>On the side lines, Joy is back to being stoked “Wow, so that’s what your [X GON' GIVE IT TO YA] does?”

And I should add in something where Joy looks disappointed when Vicky is stuck on the footprints.

And also add in something at the beginning where Dora sees Joy and has a "You?!" expression while Joy just waves and says "Hiiiii!"

Lots of little things need to be done to this since as I'm writing it right now I'm very much so probably too tired.

I'm still not up for Vicky becoming sub to Joy. More or less Joy becomes too overconfident in controlling Vicky that she is fixated on vengeance on the gang and forgets everything else (ironic given her stand) and then she loses her balance and therefore control of Vicky, culminating in an OH SHIT moment as the pissed off redhead looms over her.

Yeah, I'm not doing that.

You guys seem to think that Joy's stand works by letting her remote control someone's brain.

What Joy has done here is insert herself just enough into Vicky's memories so that Vicky thinks of her as a "friend" and will listen to what she says without killing her, giving her enough room to make suggestions and manipulate how they make Vicky feel when she hears them.

In this fight Joy is like a cheerleader egging Vicky on.

>MIXED EMOTIONS: 「SWEET EMOTION」 can drown the victim on negative thoughts by imposing its tone onto the victim's mind. In prolongated cases, it can lead to mind control of the weakened victim.

Mind control is possible for Joy though.

Prolonged cases means more than the at tops 20 minutes Joy has been manipulating Vicky for so far.

>On the side lines, Joy is back to being stoked “Wow, so that’s what your [X GON' GIVE IT TO YA] does?”
>Summer: “Yeah, pretty much. Your Stand's cool too, but I know how to deal with that kind of power; fought some aliens with the same trick once.”
>Joy is speechless, she wonders if [Sweet-E] worked on her.
>Summer: “...Even though I know you were there with us. Just sayin'”.
>Joy: “Wonderful! Then let's move on, there's no good remembering those dark, sad times.”

>Back to the fight, Vicky has gotten considerably stronger and faster now; she’s closed the gap between herself and Dora in only a couple seconds
>The chainsaw is coming down on Dora, but [Boots] manages to kick it away, connecting with the motor case of it, not the blade
>However, [Sid Vicious] has grabbed [Boots]’ other leg with its free hand and its squeezing down
>Dora grimaces in pain as her own leg has indentations on it as if it were being squeezed by multiple hands
>Dora is stuck and [Boots] is frantically kicking [Sid Vicious] to no effect; Vicky raises the axe again to deliver the killing blow “Any last words, twerpette?”
>Dora: “… Seis.”
>The chain saw suddenly explodes, when [Boots] had kicked it a blue footprint was placed upon it
>It was holding it with the corresponding hand Vicky was holding the axe with and she drops it in surprise from the sudden sensation
>Multiple explosions go off on [Sid Vicious], it finally releases [Boots] during this and Dora takes the opportunity to put some distance between them
>After the last of the blasts are over and the smoke clears Vicky is still standing, she tanked all of the explosions and, aside from looking slightly singed, is no worse for wear

Looking slick, user. I'm thinking a bullet in the middle would be best. It illustrates that he knows both where it's been and where it's going.

>Joy loses control of Vicky
>Vicky's pissed
>Summer tries to calm her down, fails
>Vicky chases Joy
>Joy runs into the crowd, self inserts into random stand users to help protect her from Vicky
>Massive fight in the distance means that no one is stopping Dora and the gang from proceeding with the plot

I was still going to go with Vicky being beaten by Sticks turning her brain into a vegetable with her stand.

>Get Joy to not become a worse Yo-Yo Ma with another fight
>She ends up getting Kars'd at the end of it
You try and defy fate, it'll end up becoming more of a bitch to you.

Did any of the protagonists or die yet, or later in the part even you would just come back?

So make her into a meat pinata for when Vicky's brain snaps back from being a tomato.

Include a nice note pinned to her and everything.

Anyway, I am phenomenally tired, so more on the Vicky fight and whatever comes with it tomorrow after I'm done with jobs.

What said sounds better because it gives Joy a fighting chance compared to last time. That and it shows how she could use her stand defensively not that it would matter, with it marking the end of the part

It just sounds a little more exciting than becoming a flesh statue or getting beaten to a pulp just like how most of the typical stand battles end in Jojo.

They have a writing thread up though.

They would raid us again.

Morning Bump

They were trying to do the boomerang experiment with Sticks until Vicky showed up.

Prolongated cases usually mean something like a whole day, but it really depends on how weakened the victim's mind is.

Vicky becoming sub is supposed to be interesting because its a bully becomes victim situation and it also makes sense that Vicky being attacked by StarkRavingMad would make it easier to SweetEmotion to fuck her up. Though, yea, I'd prefer us to be creative if we can.

We could have this ideia happen when Stark Raving Mad's effects start fading out and Joy gets too confident of her Stand's control, maybe this happens right after Joy finishes beating up Vicky:
>Joy: "Oh, Do you really think you can overcome my -I mean- your Sadness? My [Sweet-E] has total control over the heaviest emotion you sad fucks could ever-"
>"What the fuck did you do to me you twerp"
>"Uh, I guess the lead emotion is definitely Anger on this one."
>(Shit, I was too carried away to notice the badger's Stand effects faded out before [Sweet-E] took her over for good)

Just an passable ideia. I would really like to see Joy build up a gang of her own with her Stand even if just for some moments.

It should go like Sticks initially weakens Vicky with [SRM] before Joy gets the idea to take over her mind with her stand, becoming her puppet for a while to take on the gang, until Joy herself gets knocked out by an attack. Vicky then comes back to her senses and lets the gang go, even showing them how to get out of PI before she goes on a rampage chasing Joy down.

Or Vicky tells Summer to tend to their wounds and show them the way out since she would be too busy chasing Joy off.

>Vicky
>Being compassionate
I think it'll be better that Summer does those things of her own will while Vicky goes on a manhunt for Joy while she builds her defending stand army to fight her, leaving the conclusion of the battle unknown.

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I'm liking this better.

The sensory overload from [SRM] gives Joy the opportunity to really take over Vicky.

But Summer is going to be dead at the end of this battle since she'll have been fighting Pericles.

I don't know if Patchie can be considered a cartoon character, but i'll share it anyway

I drew these waiting for my dentist btw

That's neat.

I think he's as much of a cartoon as Tulio is.

Near the end of the arc Don Karnage should come back in a refitted Iron Vulture airship
>I, Don Karnage, the scurvy of the sky has returned! Fire!
And starts bombing the shit out of Tulio's army as payback for shooting him out of the sky at the start of that leg of the race.

So how long should the Vicky fight go on for until Sticks throws her stand above Vicky's head and fries her mind?

I know what comes after that, that's all that's been discussed, but where I am in the writting process is still before that.

It should be enough to establish she's a threat, for sure. I'm thinking maybe have her get a good hit in that really fucks up one of the party, then Sticks ends the fight as quickly as possible.

>American mercenaries bomb the shit out of the chilean president and his cohorts
This shouldn't make me laugh, but it does.

Well in this context they ARE pirates, and Don Karnage was only hired to transport racers to the next leg of the race before someone blew up one of his ship's engines and forced him into Tulio's air space.

It's all part of Nobody's plan so that no one can declare war on him or America.

By the time Don Karnage comes back, Tulio will already be without a head due to a "people's revolt" so there won't be a proper government in place at the time to retaliate, just the military getting their shit pounded.

All this this will work in the people of that country's favor (I'm not sure if the country should actually be Chili) since their dictator will be dead and the military will not be able to take control.

All part of Nobody's plan.

Well so far Vicky has already seemingly killed Susie and Dora can't so much put a scratch on her.

So at what point should Dora's backup arrive?

Nice

Neato

According to shonen tradition, at the last possible second before Dora gets wrecked.

So seeing how Vicky just tanked the best Dora could do, that should be very soon in the fight.

Now I'd imagine she gets clocked in the head by a boomerang.

So, could The Brain and Monsieur Mallah be victims of [loss] in Part 8?

Thanks

As for their powers and stats

「When Worlds Collide: Past」
Power: A
Speed: B
Range: D
Durability: C
Precision: A
Development: B

「When Worlds Collide: Future」
Power: B
Speed: D
Range: A
Durability: A
Precison: C
Development: B

Both are very alike, with differences being they primary stats. 「When Worlds Collide: Past」 being based on Melee and 「When Worlds Collide: Future」 on Ranged attacks.

Each has a vision power:
Past can show whatever happened to a object or person to it's user as long as he can touch it, Future can do the same but only showing what will happen.

「Inter-Era Rave」
When working together, both stands grant their users time travel. It only works when the souls of the users have accepted to collaborate, wich can be hard considering Patchy and Potty relationship, most of the time they hate eachother at heart.

So? What do you guys think?

Could we have Mean Angel in part 7? Maybe call his Stand [Headbanger]

In case you hadn't noticed he ended up with Supermans indestructible skull.

youtube.com/watch?v=0GErGfHjHQ0

Handsome Tulio has Supes' skull at first in part 7.

We still haven't determined who gets it after him.

Maybe Mean finds it, does a bit of Shakespeare and then goes "Ah well, one mans skull is another mans soup bowl." and takes it back to his camp to make it into one. When everything else he tries to get it split with breaks, he say's "That does it...AH'M GOING UP TA FOUAH ON YAH!" and gives it a walloping great headbutt, at which point he absorbs it.

Who are our corpse part guardians and locations to drive through in part 7?

Right now, just from memory, I think the first check point is kaiju Hollywood.

Then from there it's somewhere in Kansas with the first corpse part detour being to the old ruins of the Bagge farm from part 1. Samurai Jack is guarding it and he's old, he enters the race when the part is stolen.

I don't know where it goes from there, but there's a water section of the race across the Atlantic to the Old Country.

Once in the Old Country the check point is the robot town next to the pit of the Sunken Looniversity. There's some stuff planned for that town before they go exploring.
We foreshadowed the corpse in part 5 there with one of the arms being something they had in storage. It is guarded by Nightmare Bitters.

Racers are then loaded into Don Karnage's flying ship to be transported to the next leg of the race, but I guess BIG GUY Nobody sabotages the ship and forces it into Handsome Tulio's airspace where they are open fired upon by his military and the racers are dropped into a hostile country and must race their way out. Handsome Tulio has the skull and stuff happens to kill him and take it from him.

I don't know where they go from there.

The Moon was mentioned.

It's not all planned out at all.

I think the rules of the race are it is divided into lengths. There's a time limit for each length, if you make it to the check point before the time limit expires then you qualify to keep participating. Points are awarded to racers based on position and time.

To make it interesting, maybe have it so that every minute early a racer arrives at a check point, that's a minute added to a personal "grace period" after the time limit is up so they still have a chance to make it to the next check point.

Once the time limit is up there's like a day to do whatever at the check point before the next destination for the next length of the race is announced.

Mr. Nobody picks the next locations to keep anyone from cheating and trying to sneak ahead.

Salad Fingers, Bionicle, The Beast (OTGW), a circus (Jojo's Circus?), and the Backson have all been suggested as guards too IIRC.

But what I don't think has been suggested are the locations.

Not every leg of the race will have a corpse part.

I don't even know how many there are supposed to be.

The Beast was in Aberdale. Clarence, Sumo, and Jeff are investigating disappearances in the area as the second coming of the Men At Work.

Cape Suzette was also suggested for just a drive through location.

If we're talking race routes, we should have it run through CN City. D.A.V.E. could ambush the heroes and finally have that damn fight with Tom.

I think we could have more foreign locations, just so we can have more foreign Cred Forums characters to appear. Like, some place in french cartoons, in russian cartoons, in japanese cartoons. What do you guys think?

>Vicky: “Is that all you got, twerpette? You’re seriously no match for me and my [Sid Vicious].”
>Vicky’s speed closes the distance Dora put between them in an instant
>Vicky punches Dora right in the gut like she did to Susie, Dora feels as if she’s been hit in ten different places all at the same time despite there being only one impact
>Dora goes flying and smashes into a tree, splintering it where she impacted, she was lucky it softened the impact and not the rock face behind it
>Despite the blood and pain, Dora still manages to get back on her feet and begins staring Vicky down
>Vicky is looking smug and confident about her victory
>Dora, thinking (Damn, she’s tough. It seems her stand multiples the effect of her action. One punch becomes 10, one slash becomes a gale. And the other redhead did something to make her even stronger. The others are still at least two minutes away with all the commotion she’s caused. How do I beat her?)
>Suddenly the light bulb goes on and Dora starts grinning
>Vicky is still laughing about how weak Dora is compared to her, until she notices the look on Dora’s face
>Vicky: “You getting cocky now after just ‘cause you survived a warm up punch?” Vicky picks up her axe again “You’re about to smile real wide then!”
>Once again Vicky takes off like a rocket aiming to make Dora eat her axe’s blade
>Once again Vicky is missing her swing when she takes a step in the wrong direction
>Vicky: “What, this again?! It’s useless!”
>[Sid Vicious] takes the axe and smashes the ground again destroying where the trail of red footprints was
>As Vicky laughs, she looks around and spots Dora in the distance looking up at her, Vicky’s expression changes to one of confusion since it looks like Dora is standing on a vertical wall
>Gravity then resumes, Vicky had been walking up the cliff face following a trail left by [Boots]
not much written past this, but over the limit regardless.

Could work.

Miraculous Ladybug for Paris.

Nu Pogodi for Russia.

Gregory Horror Show/Pecola for Japan?

>The ground her stand destroyed was part of the cliff wall and is now falling with her
>Vicky lands on the ground and is buried by boulders

Naturally this is not the end of her or even of the fight, but anons seem to WANT annoyingly drawn out fights.

Can't do anything with Japanese comics or cartoons.
It'd have to be a Japanese setting from a Cred Forums related source material and characters.

I was thinking Mélusine from the french comic could be the eye in the sky for the race on her broomstick (she's a witch if anyone didn't know).

So the race starts... somewhere. Goes to kaiju Hollywood (California), then to Aberdale (Arizona), then to Nowhere (Kansas) then to somewhere else and by then they know about the corpse parts.

Who starts the race?

TV's Adam West?

Pretty sure TOM starts the race, but having any of the cartoon Adam West characters in this might be cool if with can spin it with the concept of heroism.

Or maybe Adam West is Mr. Nobody's VP.

Does part 7 begin with the race or are there some pre-race build up bits?

The fight is going perfectly, very nice, user. Are we going to have Joy plan it with Summer and have both of them overthrown Vicky or is Joy just going to advance on the opportunity?

Also, I think Vicky should say for Joy to help in the fight by lowering Dora's mood and making her numb, just so we can have Vicky taking advantage of both her lackeys' Stands.

Just as Vicky is going to attack a dazed, weakened Dora, we see a disc-like set of rings hit Vicky in the head. Then Sticks appears out of nowhere and remarks Vicky isn't fighting fair at all.

Same fag that did the Patchie and Potty drawings

Stand Name:「U2」
Stand User: Hoagie P. Gilligan Jr.

>Joy is looking shocked, then pissed off. As she looks like she’s about to have a tantrum, Summer puts a hand on her shoulder with an apathetic look on her face and shakes her head, then points to the pile of boulders
>They begin shaking, then Vicky bursts out from under them, her stand power is moving like flames and she’s got skulls in her eyes as she looks at Dora who is still stone faced and only sweating a little
>*BOINK*
>Vicky just got clocked in the back of the head by a piece of metal bent in the shape of a boomerang
>She turns to find the soon to be dead individual “Who threw that?”
>The boomerang returns to Sticks who is standing a little ways a way with Pericles flying some distance above her
>Sticks: “Me, ya jacked up harlot!”
>Vicky is scowling pretty hard now with jagged teeth before turning “Summer! Go deal with them! I’m not letting this twerpette out of my sight.”
>Summer sighs, “OK.” and summons her stand again. It yells “LET’S GET RICKED!” before buffing Summer up to body builder levels
>The hulking Summer jumps over to Sticks and swings a fist at her
>Sticks ducks at the last second “Holy cow!” as Summer’s fist has punched right into the rock face they’re next to
>Sticks rolls for cover as Summer dislodges her fist
>The metal boomerang latches onto to Summer’s neck, it is now being controlled by Pericles’ [Master of Puppets] and he’s attempting to choke her with it
>Summer flexes and the force of it is enough to bend the piece of metal the other way enough for her to pull it off
>Pericles is shocked and gasps “Übermensch?!” before the wall of muscle is going after him now with Hulk jumps

>Meanwhile, Sticks has climbed up the rock face and has managed to get on the red trail of footprints [Boots] was leaving so Dora could get up to a cliff and out of Vicky’s range
>In their temporary safety Sticks asks “So what’s the redhead’s story?”

Stand Name: 「Free Four」
Stand User: Wallabee Beetles

P.S.: Ignore the names I written, they are the Brazilian dub ones

>Dora: “See that blue haired girl over there? She has a grudge against me and set the redheads after us.”
>Sticks: “Ugh, typical petty mean girl behavior.”
>Dora: “El demonio down there can multiply the collateral damage from her attacks. One hit from her blew Susie’s arm off.” Dora looks at Vicky with distain “She’s probably in the middle of re-spawning now.”
>Sticks: “Ah geez, good thing I told the others to hang back. Roid rage over there seems to inflate her muscles for a power boost. I swear to god if she says ‘4U’ I’m gonna kill her myself somehow.”

I don't think Vicky knows what Joy's stand does. She only thinks she knows Joy without actually knowing her or anything about her.

After the ring goes over Vicky's head and she gets sensory overload, Joy will have a melt down and assume direction control (as much as she can) over Vicky in a last ditch effort to kill Dora.

Should Summer get "riggedy riggedy wrecked" by her muscles exploding before the whole ring over the head bit, further fueling Joy's melt down?

I think it should go like this:
>Vicky gets shut down
>Joy gets mad
>Summer buffs Joy and she controls Vicky
>Joy loses control
>Pissed off buffed Vicky chases off buffed Joy, cue her being able to mass self insert into the crowd due to the buffing to defend her from Vicky
>Summer, being the only one left dies afterwards

Is the stand doc supposed to be like that?

I wasn't planning on Joy getting buffed.

Some point prior to the ring, Vicky should bark at Joy to do something prompting a cheerleader act from her that gives Vicky that "epiphany" and creativity she needs to force Dora and Sticks down.

Joy, in a cheerleader routine for Vicky, is not something I can come up with words for since I don't know what a cheerleader chant typically consists of.

What can we say, we like Bee Movie.
No, we got raided and haven't changed it back yet.

How about something like:

"V-I-C-K-Y"
"Cross her and you're gonna die!"

Here's the new redhead gang.

I decided to give Joy the bag with core memories (now, maybe Jawbreakers) to mirror her with her movie counterpart, where she's walking on a strange senseless place with Sadness and a bag.

Summer and Vicky are just using previously estabilished designs, so I don't have much to add about them.

It's a good start, but it would need a bit more.

Maybe a play on Victoria = victory?

This is pretty much the song all over again for me.

Joy's hair looks kinda ugly with that brown over taking the blue.

Neat.

I'm also kind of stuck on what the epiphany should be that [Sweet Emotion] gives Vicky.

And I had an idea for later after Vicky goes tomato for a bit where Sadness appears inside her mind and shoves the fetal position men in white suits away from the controls to show her taking over. Yes, there was an episode of FoP inside of Vicky's head with her emotions shown as being operated by men in white suits and a little girl anger.

So that'll be fun once I finally get there.

Better make it full golden blonde, completely blue or something then? What do you think?

Very Niceus, user. Going to post this to the booru.

Full blue sounds better

We should parody Icky Vicky, maybe?

>V-I, C-K-Y
>The sound of her name is of little loser's cry
>Go Vicky!
>OOO! OOO!
>Go Vicky!
>OOO! OOO!
>She's a fire-breathing dragon in a girl's black jeans!
>Sid Vicious
>OOO! OOO!
>Go for it Vicky! You've got this!

Like this then? She has the same pallete of her emotion counterpart now.

Yeah, looks much better.

Oh, that is good.

That activates the boost power of [Sweet Emotion] to give Vicky's tactical smarts a boost up over her rage clouding her thinking power.

So, how do you attack someone who has the high ground?

Oh wait a minute. This is so obvious I couldn't see it.

The simple solution is to go after Pericles with Summer forcing them to come down and help their friend.

That's the insight MIXED EMOTIONS can give Vicky.

So it will turn into a gang fight now?

>Down below, Vicky is fuming; she picks up part of a tree and throws it up at them, it explodes with much more impact than it should
>Vicky barks over at Joy “Why don’t you do something useful!?”
>Joy is frozen in place, but then begins to glow with stand power and starts a cheerleader routine
>Vicky looks unamused, but then the gears in her head start turning thanks to Joy’s MIXED EMOTIONS ability
>She turns her gaze over to Summer and Pericles “Fine, if you’re not coming down, I’ll just go after your little friend.”
>Pericles is now using steel beams trying to bind Summer’s arms and legs with them, but all it’s doing is slowing her down a little
>Vicky begins walking over to Summer slowly, but before she can get there a boulder Dora and Sticks dropped is cleaved in two above her head by her stand
>As the chunks drop around her she looks up and sees Dora racing down the cliff side at her following her purple monkey of a stand, a look of anger and determination on her face
>Vicky grins again as she readies to intercept her, but then the bits of rock around her feet detonate; Dora had coated it with blue foot prints before dropping it
>In the dust Dora has [Boots] do the DORADORADORADORADORA thing all over [Sid Vicious]
>It’s tanking all the kicks before grabbing [Boots] leg again and then landing a clean hit to the side of its head
>Dora is also blow to the side by the hit; [Boots] disappears and she’s launched into the rocks hard, now in a daze, blood coming from the side of her face
>Vicky raises the axe again; Joy is biting her nails with excitement
>Sticks was watching the whole thing, her stand has been out the entire time as she desperately tries to search the multi-verse for anything that might be useful in this fight
>Sticks: “Come on, something anything… Dang it I don’t have time for this! I need something to throw! Something… something…” her eyes darting around the small ledge she’s on
cont.

>Vicky: “Now, you die!”
>Suddenly Vicky is seeing double, two Dora?! Then 4, then 8, then 16, but not all the same, one is wearing a cowboy hat, another is more muscular, one has pink hair, another has a beard
>Vicky: “Is this the power of another enemy stand?!” she swings at one of the Doras
>From Dora’s perspective Vicky has just missed her again, and there’s something glowing above her head
>Sticks landed next to her and is now dragging her away from Vicky
>Back to what Vicky is seeing she’s now seeing multiple of herself, some are killing Dora, some are baking cookies with her
>Vicky continues to swing wildly “What’s happening?”
>Dora and Sticks are now a safe distance when Dora begins recovering a little “What… did you do?”
>Sticks: “I made her see what I see. I threw my [Stark Raving Mad] at her and now she gets a taste of all the crazy crazy crazy in my face all the time when I use it.”
>Dora: “I didn’t know… you could… do that.”
>Sticks: “Well that makes two of us then.”

Now I'm going to go the Summer fight.

Nope.

Should be more like:
>V-I, C-K-Y
>Her name makes all the weaklings cry!
>Go, Go. Vicky!
>OOO! OOO!
>Go, Sid Vicious!
>OOO! OOO!
>She's a fire-breathing dragon in a pair of black jeans! Her stand's a serial killer straight outta a movie!
>Go, Go, Vicky!
>OOO! OOO!
>Go, Sid Vicious!
>OOO! OOO!
>Go for it Vicky! You've got this!

These guys, right? To be honest, they can easily pass off as Speedwagon workers.

Yeah, those guys.

The movie part of that breaks the flow if you ask me.
>Straight off the big screen
would flow better.

Maybe move the black genes bit right after the first OOO! OOO!

We can do even better

>V-I, C-K-Y
>Her name makes all the weaklings cry!
>Go, Go. Vicky!
>OOO! OOO!
>Go, Sid Vicious!
>OOO! OOO!
>She's a fire-breathing dragon in a pair of black jeans! Her stand's a serial killer straight outta the movie screens!
>Go, Go, Vicky!
>OOO! OOO!
>Go, Sid Vicious!

>Go for it Vicky! You've got this!

>Scene pans over to Summer and Pericles, Summer has noticed what happened “Vicky?!” and tries to go over there, turning her back to Pericles
>Summer is then caught around the neck by a metal cable and lifted into the air by it slightly
>Pericles: “Nein, Übermensch, your fight is with me.”
>Summer now looks mad and tries ripping the cable in half, her stand is buffing her up to even more unsightly proportion now venturing into something more /d/ than /fit/
>Her stand shouts “ALL KINDS OF GAINS!”
>Her brute strength is now enough to rip the cable like a paper straw wrapper
>She’s starting to look like Tetsuo and Pericles is not amused by this
>Pericles has amassed more metal from the scrap yards now surrounding the concert made during the stage’s construction
>He shoots them like spears into Summer and begins twisting them inside of her like a second skeleton as he applies his [MoP]’s magnetic powers to lift Summer into the air and begin thrashing her about
>Summer needs more power to be able to at least move her body the way she wants to and once again her stand buffs her
>Now she really looks like final form Tetsuo and is able to move her arms enough to grab the rock face, fingers digging into it
>The tension is building with the struggle between her muscles and Pericles magnetism
>Then there’s a disturbing popping noise as her stand says “Riggedy riggedy wrecked!”
>Panel of Pericles and there is now a spray of gore he’s dodging
>Summer buffed herself up too much and her body couldn’t take it, her muscles exploded

This could probably use some bantz, but I'm drawing a blank on that.

Next up is Joy doing the thing.

>Back to Dora, she’s recovered enough to stand up on her own
>Sticks plucks her stand back from atop the now slumped over on her knees, non-responsive, and drooling Vicky
>Sticks, putting her stand back over her own head before dismissing it, points to Joy “So, what do you wanna do about her?”
>Dora stares at Joy with contempt
>Joy is looking terrified and moves in preparation to start running away
>Dora: “Nothing. Her stand lets her get inside people’s heads. She’s powerless once you figure that out.”
>Joy’s eyes open wide as she stares at the ground, her mouth ajar, hands open and at her sides
>Joy, thinking (Powerless… Powerless?!)
>Joy’s hands clench into fists as a rage starts to rise within her “Powerless? I’ll show you…” Joy looks up and stares at them “I’ll show you what my stand is really capable of!”

>Scene changes to a metal room lined with screens each displaying Vicky’s current situation
>There’s an empty chair in front of each screen
>[Sweet Emotion] appears inside this room and looks around, she walks twards a control booth and stumbles on something
>It’s a man wearing a white suit on the floor in the fetal position sucking his thumb
>Looking around the room there are several identical men in the same position
>Joy’s stand has infiltrated Vicky’s mind
>[Sweet-E]: “Well these guys look out of it.” She walks around them to continue to a control booth “Guess I have to run the show now.”

>Back outside of Vicky’s mind, Joy has been glowing with stand power and Vicky begins to glow with the same blue stand power
>Vicky is getting back up on her feet, Dora and Sticks are having an “Oh Crap!” moment, Pericles is just getting back to them and doesn’t know what’s going on
>Dora: “Time to run.”

Very good, the point that Joy's Stand looks useless at first is really well brought up here, it's perfect.

I want to see them as reaccuring characters in Part 7

last bump before bed

>Pericles gets a large piece of metal and the three of them slide off on it back down the hill to the edges of the concert with Vicky and Joy hot on them, [Sweet-E] is clearly visible in one of Vicky’s eyes
>Sticks: “So what’s the plan?”
>Dora: “Try to find cover in the crowd, lose them, then we’ll see if what you’ve found out with the tower works.”
>One more slope to go and they’ll be in the crowd, but Vicky jumps over head and lands in front of them, Joy is riding her like some kind of war beast
>Joy: “Nowhere to go, nowhere to go.”
>The three of them bail on the sled and try to scatter, Dora tries drawing Joy’s attention so she’ll chase her as Sticks and Pericles get out of the way
>[Sid Vicious] is out and swinging, it lacked a weapon until it grabbed the metal sled
>Dora is cut off from running and Joy advances from behind Vicky
>Joy: “Maybe now I’ll finally get to see you die… Who knows? Maybe I’ll kill you more than once just to make sure I see you break!”

>From behind Joy there is a voice
>???: “Did you forget about me?”
>A monstrous arm of flesh wraps around Joy and pulls her away from Vicky
>Joy: “Impossible! No one re-spawns that fast!”
>Close up of Susie, she still looks wrecked and the monster arm is covering the arm Vicky gibbed during her sneak attack
>Susie: “Who said anything about re-spawning?”
>She flicks her monster arm like a bed sheet and thumps Joy on the ground over and over again
>Without Joy near her, Vicky begins holding her head and shaking, [Sweet-E] is losing control and looks concerned watching Joy from inside Vicky’s eye
>Joy is finally knocked dizzy enough that [Sweet-E] leaves Vicky’s mind
>Susie: “I am going to make sure you feel ze full consequences of attacking those I am fond of.”
>Joy gulps
>Vicky: “No…”
>Joy looks over her shoulder with some relief to see Vicky back up and about
>Vicky: “She messed with my mind… SHE’S MINE!”
cont.

>Joy’s look of relief turns to panic
>Susie: “Zhen by all means.” She drops Joy on the incline and she rolls down the hill to the crowd with Vicky going after her at full speed
>They watch the path of gore for a bit as Vicky gives chase
>Dora is looking at Susie’s arm
>Susie: “Oh, zis? Do not concern yourself.” Some junk falls out of the monster arm, the flesh turning back into rocks, bits of metal, clothing, until the arm is about normal sized, but the flesh still looks twisted and warped.
>Susie opens and closes the hand a few times and moves the arm to test its mobility “I did what I had to do to survive. It was a promise, no? And I also did not wish to give ze Warden ze satisfaction of my death, despite how tempting its cold embrace was.”
>Sticks: “Dang…”
>Susie: “It is not ze first time I have had to affix a permanent replacement.” She points to her lazy eye “How do you zhink I got zis?”


>Scene changes to the crowd, we see Droopy with Woody still cuffed asking anyone close by "Excuse me... Excuse me..." but they're always getting shoved away in a mosh pit before he can get any further.
>One of the people who’s shoved into him actually says “Sorry, dog.” So Droopy doesn’t lose his temper
>Suddenly a girl with blue hair runs past him in a panic with a red head angrily chasing her
>Droopy: “I wonder what that’s all about?” He turns in the direction they came from and sees Dora, Sticks, and Pericles standing up on the hills surrounding the valley the concert is in, his hair changes direction symbolizing that he’s changed marks
>He turns back to look at Woody and sees the cuff is empty, he slipped away while Droopy was distracted
>Droopy: “Oh dear, he’s such a handful.”
>Droopy’s radio suddenly comes to life, a high pitched static-y voice comes over it “Excuse me, but are you a guard? I might have some things to tell you.”

I'm not 100% happy with the Joy controlling Vicky part, but I really want to move on from this and get out of PI already.

I should point out that I've been writing this section imagining all of PI having dimmed lighting for the concert.

>Dora, Susie, Sticks and Pericles have met back up with Wall-E and Inch High
>Wall-E is noticeably concerned over Dora and Susie injuries with [Sunday Clothes] coming out of him
>Dora: “Don’t worry about it Wall-E, it’s just a flesh wound.”
>Susie: “So, we are finally here, away from ze concert, what break through did you uncover, Sticks?”
>Sticks: “OK, so remember how causality is all messed up in here? The Warden can see anything that happens through that tower’s eyes. If he’s looking in your direction you can’t get near it, this applies to anything it can see moving towards it.”
>Sticks throws a boomerang at the tower and it comes back
>Sticks: “Now everyone turn around and don’t look at the tower.”
>Sticks throws the boomerang again, this time it lands several feet further away
>Sticks: “Any object not being observed is both moving towards the tower and being sent back until it is observed.”
>She throws another one, this time they wait longer before looking and it lands even further away
>Sticks: “And right now the tower is looking over there, at that concert, it ain’t spinning like it’s supposed to so it doesn’t see us.”
>Inch High: “So as long as we don’t see it and it doesn’t see us we can get closer?”
>Pericles: “How annoyingly simple. It would appear aiding those dummkopfs was in our best interest after all.”
>Sticks: “OK, about face, don’t look at it, walk backwards until we hit something.”

>They’ve been walking for a while now
>They’ve notice that the scenery has not been changing that much, just a dull white void in front of them now and flat ground below them
>Dora finally bumps into something, “Guys, we might be there.” She gropes around at whatever is behind her, it doesn’t feel like a tower, it feels like a person “Or not.”
>A familiar voice: “How did you guys get here? This is a restricted area of [Pure Imagination] off limits to inmates."
cont.

>They have not found a tower, they have found [Dark Castle]
>Dora, still not turning to face Gaz’s stand “Madre de Dios, you again?”
>[DA]: “Someone has to keep you guys in check while the Warden acts like an idiot.”
>Another familiar voice: “And who’s to say that’s your job?”
>Standing behind [DA] is Droopy
>Pericles gets his feathers ruffled over hearing this voice
>Sticks: “Don’t turn around. If we look who knows where we’ll end up.”
>[DA]: “Where’d you come from?”
>Droopy: “I’ve been here the whole time escorting these prisoners who are willingly heading back to their proper cells.”
>[DA]: “This is the inside of the Warden’s stand, it’s all one cell.”
>Droopy: “So I’ve been told.” A close up of the radio on his belt “This place isn’t on the books though; there’s no paperwork, no documentation, no protocol for it in the employee manual. That’s no way to run a prison.”
>[DA] says nothing
>Droopy continues “There’s also a case of kidnapping here with a misplaced piece of equipment along with this diminutive gentleman who, try as I might, cannot recall ever seeing any record of in the prison system.”
>[DA]: “Ugh, talking out here like this is a pain. Keep walking.”
>The group finally arrives at a wall and pass through a doorway that shuts in front of them
>[DA]: “You can turn around now.”
>They are now inside the watch tower, there’s a large beam going up it with a spiral staircase twirling around the interior walls

That's where I'm at right now, but I'm not really satisfied with it. I don't think I have the conversations right. Best to leave continuing it to tomorrow.

And this is my last bump before bed.

More work towards finally getting out of PI and what lies beyond it as we inch closer to the finale.

Morning Bump

Had we ever considered John Constantine for Part 7?

>[DA]: “Someone has to keep you guys in check while the Warden acts like an idiot.”

To add up

"However, I'm considering to let Wall-E go through since he shouldn't be here at all. Matter of fact, I'm impressed you managed to bring him here with safety with all those horrible things lurking at [Pure Imagination]."
Dora: "And why wouldn't we protect him? He is our friend."
[DC]: "So I see, and I'm glad for that. But rules are rules, and I can't let the rest of you pass."

>Standing behind [DA] is Droopy

[DC] turns to face him.

[DC]: “Droopy? Where’d you come from?”
>Droopy: “Hello Ms. Membrane. It's been years, isn't it? As for your question, I’ve been here the whole time escorting these prisoners who are willingly heading back to their proper cells.”

>[DC]: “This is the inside of the Warden’s stand, it’s all one cell.”

Droopy: “So I’ve been told.” A close up of the radio on his belt “This place isn’t on the books though; there’s no paperwork, no documentation, no protocol for it in the employee manual. And not to mention two of these belong to the psych ward."
[DC] pokes her sword on Sticks' head.
[DC]: Now that you mentioned, I recognize seeing this furry as one of Von Drake's lab hamsters once.
Sticks: What? I'm not a hamster, I am...!
[DC]: Shut up, idiot.
Droopy: Well, as I was saying... That’s no way to run a prison.
[DC]: ...

>Droopy continues “There’s also a case of kidnapping here with a misplaced piece of equipment along with this diminutive gentleman who, try as I might, cannot recall ever seeing any record of in the prison system.”

[DC]: "Kidnapping"? But Wall-E went with them willin... -it then pauses for a moment, making a thoughtful expression- I see what are you trying to say here.
[DC]: "Listen, talking out here like this is a pain. Follow me and keep walking.”

Something that should be really added here is that Gaz wouldn't make a fuss with Wall-E and would let him reach the watch tower with no problem. It would be dumb and lacking sense that she says that line "keeps you guys in check" including Wall-E in the batch.

Well, Nu Pogodi's Volk is appearing in Heart of Melody... Though something may have happened to the rabbit.

Also, yes I'm still alive folks, Hi there.

I think if [DC] turned around it would also be sent somewhere else in PI.

I could see him being in it somewhere, but I don't really know where.
I think they first thing to do when we get to Part 7 is layout the whole story and figure out which characters we are going to use.

We also need to remember the whole Goofy plot line we set up for it in part 5.

So they finally meet Gaz face to face.

Should she give them a first aid kit?

Bump.

I don't know, almost seems a little too easy.

That depends what version of Gaz people want to see here.

Cartoon Gaz was much more cruel and apathetic, Comic Gaz (which a lot of Invader Zim fans and even Jhonen Vasquez prefer) shows a bit more of empathy while still being mean.

I think she should give them a first aid kit, after some little convincing of Wall-E that is. Besides, Membrane is going to join the rebellion in the climax so there is not much reason of her to antagonize them at this point.

Well it's just a regular first aid kit, not a miracle cure mend all wounds and restore you to full health box.

Like a "don't bleed all over my floor" despite the blood on them having dried a while ago.

Oh, okay. In that case, I'm hip if Wall E has to push her a bit.

Gaz: Wow, you guys look that have been hit by a bus several times.
Dora: That is an accurate way to summarize what happened.

Cue flashback of several busses with the wardens face blaring the Crazy Bus theme slamming into them.

More like an image spot of Vicky as a bus.

Bump.

Will stumble through more greentext later.

Finally got a chance to catch up with this. Whoever did the Droopy/Woody fight, you are brilliant.

Thanks. Shout out to the other guy that redid Woody's dialogue to be more in character too, really appreciate it.

Is it just a straight shot out of PI now?

Pretty much. Just need to get the Gaz stuff sorted and written up.

There are no more fights left in PI.

I updated it, but now moving on.

>[DA]: “Come on, step up into my office.”
>After walking up some of the stairs, the arrive at another door, through it they see an office lined with monitors displaying locations all over PI, a fancy looking gaming computer, and a spindly looking girl sitting in a beanbag chair playing a handheld gaming device
>She closes the device, when she does so her [Dark Castle] disappears
>Droopy: “You’re looking well, Ms. Membrane.”
>Wall-E is tapping his hands together nervously looking back and forth between Dora and Susie and back to Gaz
>Gaz: “Geez, you guys look like a bus was backed over you.” She’s looking at Dora and Susie when she says this
>Gaz gets up and walks over to a cabinet, then takes out a first aid kit then throws it over to them, “I don’t need you bleeding all over my floor.”
>Despite Dora and Susie’s injuries having long since scabbed over, the kit is still put to good use between them as Gaz and Droopy begin talking
>At first they just stare at each other silently
>Dora and Susie attend to their various gashes and wounds, Pericles eyes Gaz with suspicion and distrust, but remains non-violent
>Gaz breaks the silence, “I’m over due for some vacation time.” She gets up and stuffs some things in a bag, “Cover for me while I’m gone.”
>Gaz is still packing, “The job is easy; all you have to do is keep anyone from going up these stairs to the top of the tower and exiting [Pure Imagination].”
>Gaz is exiting her office while holding a duffle bag “Use your own judgment, the Warden is an idiot, but he’s a strong idiot.”
>Gaz walks up the stairs and out of sight

>In the Warden’s office, the Warden is standing on his desk rocking out, shaking his head back and forth
>He’s watching the concert through the watchtowers eyes
>Gaz emerges from the Warden’s Jailbot looking stand, the Warden takes no notice
cont.

What's bugging you in that part exactly? I could try to add some small suggestions while you guys continue writing the rest.

Cool. I actually kinda want to have heart of melody to be referenced in part 7 and part 8. Is that ok, guys?

>Gaz looks at the Warden; her eyes are squinted shut so we can’t read her expression “I’m taking my paid vacation time now.” and exits the door to the Warden’s office

So annoying when I'm over the character limit with only one line left.

Oh, and slight modification to the above
>keep anyone from going up these stairs
to
>keep the [Pure Imagination] inmates from going up these stairs

So Droopy gets some loophole abuse.

Oh, I just thought it might be a little too short is all.

Everyone kept making a big deal about Joy hijacking Vicky's mind, but it ended up not being a very long segment when I got to writing it out.

Anyway, Droopy now has Gaz's job and we are pretty much done with PI.

Next part would probably be called... "Welcome to Superhell!"

>Oh, I just thought it might be a little too short is all.

>Everyone kept making a big deal about Joy hijacking Vicky's mind, but it ended up not being a very long segment when I got to writing it out.

This.

She barely got to do anything with Vicky, not even a hit or not even possible, given how this part goes, kill.

It was pretty late at night and I was pretty tired by the time I got to that part of the fight.

I also want to keep pushing forward since I'm getting exhausted with part 6 and I have just hit upon the beginning of the last two or three parts.

>Welcome to Superhell!
>Into the Vortex
>Epilogue

That's all that's left to do for part 6 that dosen't involve going back and foxing some other part of it.

I'm going to do some rearranging for the ending bits we have on the doc currently when I write it since I feel Superhell should begin right when they get out of PI.
The concert has been going on for a while by that point and things have been dying A LOT in the crowd, way more than the usual death ratio in PI, so it should be charged enough to begin merging with their reality.

>Dethklok helped to hasten the Warden's plan
Fuck

Ok, so the next part is gonna be an all-out battle between the Warden's forces and the good guys, right? Let's sort what's happening there:

>Bobby issuing an override command to the older Propane Nightmare units to fight against the newer units
>Professor Membrane and Bruttenholm fighting alongside Bobby's robot army
>Robo-Dale vs Gameboy, the watchtower is toppled
>Pericles retiring from the fight after doing one last favor to the group
>Skarr taking control of the thrashed Mk II and III, improving them with his Stand
>Chane balls getting kicked
>Von Drake wandering the battlefield like Mr. Magoo

what else?

That's pretty much all of the Superhell arc, it's just full of chaos.

At some point Susie should get a contact from Shirley saying they're ready to shut down Supermax.
They'll need to time that to happen right as Droopy brings Dora back to the Warden using his stand to at least weaken him a little.

We also need to work out how Dora taps into the vortex's power boost, like what the process is to gain access to it.

Giffany joining the brawl I suppose, as someone suggested that she overtakes one of the MK models. Unless she was written to escape with Dethklok and Nemesis.

On the other hand, I still want to push that idea that she finally gets a robot body of her own provided by Membrane after all of this is done.

I set it up so that Giffany is currently hiding inside of Droopy's radio, so that's still very much in play.

I think other thing that should be added here is Gaz having one brief re-meeting her father before everything goes to hell and the vortex implodes.

After all, there is not definitive about the eventual fate of those characters (except the Warden) after the implosion and would be nice if father and daughter had a talk. It could happen either before the action kicks in Superhell arc or during the Into the Vortex.

I also thought about her going to see her dad before leaving for vacation.

I had planned for Gaz to get caught up in the mess of Superhell as well.

I mean not a lot of time passes between her leaving the Warden's office and Dora's group arriving there.

>Back in Gaz’s office, Droopy is looking at a watch. He notes the time “Her shift is up now. Let’s get going.”
>Dora: “Just like that?”
>Droopy: “Ms. Membrane said to keep [Pure Imagination] inmates from escaping. You four are inmates of Belle Reve, not [Pure Imagination].”


Welcome to Superhell!

>In the Warden’s office inside Belle Reve, Dora, Susie, Pericles, Wall-E, Sticks, Inch High, and Droopy all come out of the Warden’s stand before it vanishes again
>They’re finally out, Dora is ecstatic they escaped the world of [Pure Imagination], it’s the first time she’s looked genuinely happy in a long time
>There’s a tap on her shoulder, it’s the Warden, “What are you guys doing in my office? The show is still going on, you’ll miss the big finale!”

>At the Dethklok concert there has been unparalleled death and devastation to the inmates of PI, the STAR energy flows freely up into the Warden’s stand
>It looks as if cracks are beginning to appear in the sky of PI, Deadlock looks up at them, we can’t read his expression at all

>Back in the Warden’s office
>The Warden: “Oh nuts, you guys really did miss out.” He taps his cheek for a bit thinking
>Dora’s group is frozen in place not sure if they should be prepared for
>The Warden continues "Ya know, since you guys got out, I should let a few others on a field trip too!"
>The Warden’s stand suddenly appears, it’s shaking like a soda can ready to burst, he grabs the door, points it at the ceiling, and a beam of light blasts through it and out the top of the prison itself
>A rift appears in the sky that begins spreading like a burn, the once blue sky is eaten away by an ominous purple as thousands of eyes can be seen glowing in it
>The creations of PI begin pouring out of the sky and descend upon he prison, the ambient STAR energy sparks and arcs and catches something: the vortex
cont.

>The STAR energy vortex surrounding the prison is now visible, the entire structure of Belle Reve is now surrounding by a ranging maelstrom with it in the center
>The current forces the rift open even wider and it begins spreading in all direction as reality merges with the world inside the Warden’s stand
>Dora is staring at the chaos in horror
>The Warden is ecstatic, "Oh, yay! Everything is coming together, and now the entire WORLD is going to be my shiny new Superjail! Oh, but Superjail seems so underwhelming for such a mag-NI-ficent prison..."
>Dora tries to attack him with [Boots], but he flicks them away with a pinky, the others catch her, all they can do is watch
>The Warden continues paying them no mind, "Ultraprison? No, sounds a tad too feminine... Oh look, here comes some sort of Hell beast!"
>Said beast smashes through the windows of the Warden’s office and reaches for Dora, her group now in full fighting stances
>Droopy’s remains as indifferent looking as ever, but we see that his hair has changed direction again
>The Warden: "Hmm... Hell was one of the greatest prisons ever devised... but my prison will be even BETTER! I've got it!"
>He dashes over to his desk and pushes the prison wide intercom announcement button "Attention, everyone! I have WONDERFUL news! I'd like to announce that we're expanding! From now on, you all won't be living in Belle Reve or Superjail anymore!"
>Panels of Penny, Trevor, Bobby, Membrane, Gaz (who is on her way to her dad’s lab just to say hi), RoboDale, Chane, Mirage still in her cell, and whoever else all looking up at the watch tower
>The Warden: "Your new home will be in my new prison: SUPERHELL!!"
>He cackles merrily as Dora and her friends, and even Droopy are blindsided by more monsters crashing through the office ceiling and pushing them out the windows
cont. later.
We need some sequences of chaotic violence, like the ending of an episode of Superjail.

Any updates from the user drawing Part 1?
Also, besides him, are there other anons working on other Parts?

There was a new page last week
>are there other anons working on other Parts?
Not that I'm aware of

OK, thanks
Good to see you guys are still working on this
Can't wait to see it finished
Have a Jojo meme

>my Superhell speech got included
Nice!

Also, at some point we need to include a reference to pic related.

Some tweaks here and there, but I try to include anything anyone has typed up for this once I get to those parts.

Right now I need some sequences of chaos and carnage throughout the jail before Bobby takes action and issues the override code.

Then some crazy shit going down that frees prisoners who were locked up and start wading through the chaos.

Then Dora's group regrouping with Penny's group to launch a proper counter attack.

Chane should rise to some prominence here as an enemy.

Also need to arrange for Penny VS Frizzle round 2.

The Warden's line up consists of himself, the Frizz, Skarr, Chane (and Gameboy), and I guess Dredd, but he's not going to fight any one in Dora's group. I plan for him to nail the Warden with a STAR drain shot at a critical moment.

Remember that Stand that could make the user invulnerable to something as long as it remained afraid? Decided to turn it into Eduardo since they fit so well together. Is that ok? It just seemed like such a good ideia to me.

Ed is supposed to be menancing as a demon in here instead of his cutesy original design. I thought about using some old versions of him, like the one that has many eyes, but people would've said it looked ugly, so here it is.

Next should be Swiper and Rex.

He was a completely minor character in part 4, so it's probably not an issue.

I don't think most of the stands inside [Hotel California] were even named.

Well, the eyes in the sky are already there. Maybe while the Warden gloats about his newfound power, he warps himself just like his doubles inside PI.

Actually, it was turned into Eduardo in part 4 with that name.

safety bump

Threads sinking fast tonight or something?

I'm probably not going to do anymore greentext tonight. I'd actually like it if someone else could come up with some sequences to come before this

>Scene changes to the monsters rampaging across the jail, the prisoners are running for their lives and many of them are being cut to pieces in a sequence of ultra violence
>Bobby looking out the blinds of psych ward “The time is now.” He pulls out an old looking transmitter device from his desk drawer “Override code Hill-1: Ladybird.”

>Scene changes to the ground floor of the jail where some inmates are being chased by a Warden hydra
>Dora’s group is by the side lines trying to work their way out of the shit show the ground floor has become
>There’s a rumbling coming from beneath the jail
>Original Propane Nightmares come pouring out into the mix, they’re like an ant hill someone just stepped on
>The Warden hydra is now getting the shit bombed out of it by pro-PAIN explosions

The sequences showing just how fucked things are getting is just something I'm not feeling very confident writing right now.

Bump

OK, here's my bump before bed.

We're at a part in part 6 where we need to start practicing for how fast paced part 7 needs to be since they're going fast in that part.

morning britbump.

who is gonna be the one that releases the prisoners?

Bump

I'm thinking Von Drake and Mirage's cells will get walls destroyed in the chaos.

Most of the cells would probably just get wrecked by the rioting and hellbeasts roaming freely about.

If the watch tower is going down, then were is the Warden going to be at?

The roof of the jail? Is that where the final battle will be?

It depends of when Robo-Dale blows himself and takes down the tower, the Warden could have moved from there when that happens.

>The roof of the jail? Is that where the final battle will be?
sounds good

Dale's going to do that soonish in the story I think.

RoboDale VS Gameboy

Penny VS Frizz

Who is fighting Skarr?

Bobby "VS" Chane

>Who is fighting Skarr?
Either Membrane or Dredd, maybe both since he will be leading a bunch of repaired mechanismos. Where is Trevor during this?

Right, Membrane is fighting Skarr.
There was some stuff mentioned about his ability being a good counter to the robots.

Trevor is figuring out how to tap into the vortex's power boosting properties.
Once he figures that out, he'll join the fray and something will lad to him relaying the information to Dora who actually does it.

We still need the process necessary for tapping into the NOT passive buff the STAR vortex gives stands.
It has to be something that can be done from anywhere or else Dan wouldn't have been able to do it.

Bump it to the stars,

So [Fear of the Dark] had already been moved to him before I did, that's good. Also, please don't spoil part4 details for me.

I think I'll make this the final version anyway, if no one is bothered, I'll think it's ok.

Does it make sense that the Warden himself would (secretly) make some of his hellbeasts break the remaining cells? I mean, prisioners deaths do give an extra STAR boost.

Can he get a STAR boost from deaths outside of PI now with the rift above the jail and spreading?

Perhaps, his Stand is merging with reality after all

Well after Dora taps into the STAR vortex (which will be during or after most of the staff on the Warden's side are defeated), my idea is she gains the ability to leave footprints in mid air, which let's her run on the air by following her stand.

The Warden shouldn't make it easy for her to reach him, so he could throw Snatcher at her again, but he should be blown to one side by the now powered up [Boots] to show how much stronger it is then.

We could probably also have Woody falling from the sky having jumped into one of the cracks in PI, but I think if we did that then he'd only accidentally knock Dora out of mid air and Droopy would warp her up to the Warden before he smacks him away.

Or maybe Dora gets to the Warden on her own power and that's when Woody falls. Droopy was already fighting the Warden and losing, but now has to deal with Woody so Dora takes over his fight.
They end up back in the jail and Wall-E could end it quickly by having Woody wrapped in [Sunday Clothes].

Safety Bump

>There was some stuff mentioned about his ability being a good counter to the robots.

Yeah, [Smooth Operator] can suck out the electricity of things and either use it to create electric shields or transfer to other objects.

The plan is that Membrane uses SO mostly to protect the group from the Warden's forces and the hellbeasts.

What we really need right now are 2 things:

1. The level of chaos now in play being established.

2. How does one tap into this vortex to get an across the board increase to every aspect of their stand? Is it a ritual, a dance, a spoken phrase, a certain series of poses?

I'm trying to think of a reference for us to use as the vortex thing, but I can't think of anything.

Did we have the Vortex ideia from any specific cartoon? If so, did the cartoon portray any weakness?

For #1, we could have the stand users vs the hellbeasts

By that I mean the villains of the part

No, I think it was just something we might've pulled out of our asses since we needed there to be some REASON why this location was important to the Warden's plans.

I know there have been a lot of times in cartoons where a twister had odd effects on characters who go through them, but this isn't a physical phenomenon.

That's a given, but we need details, like what the hell beasts are and how crazy things are getting.
Examples of what the Warden's stand is doing to reality and all that.

Bump

Maybe you just need to drop from a high distance at the right speed through the center of the vortex to get the buff.

Dan made a perfect hole for doing that.

Alright, need to spitball some ideas for the Superhell arc.

-This arc is generally going to focus on the chaos the Warden is unleashing.
-The fights between Strickland and the prison staff takes place now.

So at first there's just an abundance of monsters and everyone fights those. When they begin to mobilize and go after the Warden, that's when Chane steps in and sends out the PN MK3s and the rest of the loyalist jail staff make their moves.

I'm thinking Chane takes center bad guy role for this. He's in the Warden's office while the Warden has stepped out to personally oversee the expanding of the rift in reality he's created. Chane will have a "The Warden cannot be bothered with your antics at this time." attitude.

Still unsure of the fight order, but Chane is going to be in the watch tower when RoboDale's self-destruct topples it. When Chane is pulling himself out of the rubble, that's when Bobby kicks him in the balls.

Beating the loyalist staff changes nothing though since the Warden is increasingly becoming more powerful with his control over reality. This is when they need to get the vortex boost just to get near him.

It'd really help if someone were to post feedback or suggest some ideas, or really anything before I start trying to write it.

The hellbeasts should look like generic demon dogs but much larger so the villain stand users would have a harder time fighting them. Some stand users could be in the process of being killed by them or by other stand user throwing them to the beasts while a select few (like Joy with [sweet emotion]) could render them tame and use an army to kill many.

Like a normal episode of Superjail

Watch a highlights reel of Superjail violence and let yourself get carried away. Just pull the nastiest, goriest, most chaotic shit you can think of out of your hat, decide which secondary characters get the brunt of it, and let it get nuts.

>what the hell beasts are
I think they should resemble the Extremosaur imaginary friends from Fosters; they're basically just giant rogue stands.

The hell beasts should have visual similarities with the Warden though since they are creations of PI.

And PI inmates will not be used in this arc.

I've always been really bad that those sing of lucid action sequences, it's one of the main reasons why I hated doing all the group fights of part 5. There were just too many characters to keep track of and there was no way to give proper focus to everyone involved.

In Superjail someone throws a knife that hits a guy in the eye who falls on a table catapulting the food on it which hits a bunch of other prisoners and then the food mutates them into monsters who carry off other prisoners while at the same time blowing a hole in the side of the jail which Jack Knife escapes out of. Meanwhile Jailbot goes through the carnage tasering and killing people, a body falls off the rails and lands in a garden where bugs quickly begin biting the unlucky sod until he's nothing but a running skeleton which spooks other mentally unstable inmates into a panic and...

I could probably modify all that into something usable here, but it's just not on the scale needed.

Yes, Cred Forums's been a little too fast these days

We could include the other characters as they're in all the chaos too:

>Clarissa's Dad is seen being attacked/tortured by Psycho's stand
>Joy is seen riding an [Sweet-E]'d giant bat-like Warden Hellbeast while Vicky's still chasing her using another Warden hellbeast
>Buffed Summer and El Oso are wrestling in the distance with the hellbeasts while Bender and Grizzly are commenting on how they are going to survive

Just some small ideias.

My vacations are over and I have some serious work to do now. Though I'll try to be around as much as I can, especially on the weekends, user.

Everyone who was in PI is still in PI with exception to Dora's group.

This is not taking place inside PI so who we have to work with prisoner wise would be Eris, Mirage, Beagle Boys, possibly Wong, and who else?

Rocko is a janitor and listed as having a stand (don't know WHICH stand he has since he's listed twice on the doc with two different ones), but we haven't used him for anything yet aside from Bobby threatening to shove his boot up Rocko's ass if the solitary confinement block wasn't cleaned up.

Great, we're in the final stretch of part 6 now and I would love to be done with it as soon as possible.

>Rocko attempts to use his stand
>two standish things pop up behind him
>reveal Warden faces and murderize the poor bastard

There was something about the Warden's Stand has to spin along the vortex, maybe one needs to "synchronize" in some way with the vortex to gain the buff.

The one in the bottom of the doc was from the early draft

The vortex is forcing the rift to open and spread outwards.

Dora's footprints cause people to follow them faster the longer they've been on the trail.

The trick to beating the Warden it to use that to reverse the spin of the vortex so the rift starts shrinking and is forced back into PI.

So Dora has to create a path and make people follow it at speeds fast enough to changes the rotation of the vortex.

>Scene changes to the monsters rampaging across the jail, the prisoners are running for their lives and many of them are being cut to pieces in a sequence of ultra violence
>One of the monsters from PI lands on the ground floor of the jail, it looks like a giant anatomically correct heart with tendrils and is wearing a comically small Warden top hat
>It lands in the mess hall right on top of a table catapulting the utensils on it
>A plastic fork hits one of the Beagle Boys right in the eye; as he begins screaming winged monsters swoop down and pick up his brothers while smashing holes through the still being repaired walls
>Gameboy launches into action and begins torching any prisoners fleeing into off limits sections of the jail as Chane slowly walks up the path to the watch tower
>The forked Beagle Boy runs screaming into the kitchen and knocks over a sealed pot of green sludge which quickly takes the form of a large human hand and runs out of the kitchen on its fingers
>Eris is in the mix, throwing her golden apple of a stand and watching prisoners and monsters fight over it, the chaos causes a fire setting off the sprinklers
>The green hand is doused with water and grows bigger before latching onto Eris
>Super zoomed in close up reveals Plankton (Spongebob) “Yes! Now you all will know the wrath of the Plankton family!”
>Eris screams as her flesh is ripped away until another monster drops from the rift, this one much bigger than the last, a hydra with each of its heads baring resemblance to the Warden
>The shockwave of it landing propels Eris some stories up into the air; just as she’s about to impact a wall the green sludge forms a fist and punches through it
>On the other side of the wall is Von Drake’s cell in the psych ward; the plankton vacate Eris who is now a skeleton (but still running around) and go for Von Drake
cont.

>[Schizophrenia] manifests and blows all the plankton away with a purple sparkling cloud, a close up reveals the plankton are being burned by it and disintegrating
>Von Drake looks through the hole in his cell and sees the chaos in the prison, there’s a huge snake thing with monkey hands and the Warden’s smile coiled around the watch tower. Giant birds are nesting in the sides of the jail and encasing inmates into eggs, a spider lady with the Warden’s smile is weaving a huge web that reads “Superhell!” above everything
>Von Drake: “What vivid hallucinations I’m having! I never knew I had quite this much imagination. I fancy having a stroll; the fresh air might do me some good.”
>Von Drake exits through the hole in his cell and his stand begins automatically doing its best to protect him from any harm

>The noise from all this is upsetting Psycho and Muzzle
>Bobby looks out the blinds of psych ward to see what the hell is going on only to be met with madness
>Bobby: “The time is now.” He pulls out an old looking transmitter device from his desk drawer “Override code Hill-1: Ladybird.”

>Scene changes to the ground floor of the jail where some inmates are being chased by a Warden hydra
>Dora’s group is in the background walking up the walls to escape the shit show the ground floor has become
>There’s a rumbling coming from beneath the jail
>Original Propane Nightmares come pouring out into the mix; they’re like an ant hill someone just stepped on
>The Warden hydra is now getting the shit bombed out of it by pro-PAIN explosions

>Dora’s group gets up to the next level of the jail
>Sticks: “This is nothing like anything I saw!”
>A huge eyeball with batwings and a Warden hat is shooting spears at them before a gunshot is heard and it drops to the ground with an X over its eye
>Right above them is Bobby, now holding a riffle
cont.

>Bobby: “Sticks, good to see you, and Droopy too.” Bobby notices Dora, Susie, and Pericles “Looks like your mission was a success.”
>A collection of knives in humanoid form drops down behind Bobby, Dora and Susie are glowing with stand power, but it’s already too close for them to get their stands out in time
>The knife monster is then blown away by a 「propane nightmare」 which strikes a pose behind Bobby as if it were a stand
>Bobby then fires another shot and hits one of those bird monsters as it was diving down on the group
>Bobby: “Bad place for a reunion, let’s go to my office.”

>The Warden was observing this from the watch tower and asks "Where was THIS guy during his whole tenure here?" with a crazy excited smile
>His joy is cut short with a tap on his shoulder by Chane “Sir, I do believe your supervision is needed elsewhere.” as Chane points up at the rift
>The Warden: “You are absolutely right! Mind the store for me while I see this through to its final stage.” And the Warden grabs onto his stand which creates a propeller above it taking them to the roof of the jail
>Chane is now in the watch tower looking over all the chaos unfolding with his hands behind his back

That's where I'm at right now.

night bump

So next up is them all holding up in Membrane's lab.

How should the planning go down? Bobby's in the know about the vortex, how much needs to be said in dialogue between the characters about their next move?

Pretty cool. Really liking how messy it is being described, it really feels like a Superjail episode.

We could try to include as much characters as possible from the later parts in the mess, just to keep this fun.

...

One crazy sequence of gore at a time.

While they're in Membrane's lab my current plan is that Skarr arrives outside of the ward and orders them to surrender immediately for the crimes of conspiring against the Warden.

I want to get some action in with the Membranes doing a father-daughter team up to wreck any robots who get into the lab. RoboDale blazes through the PN MK3s prompting Chane to send Gameboy to go deal with him.

Penny should enter the lab about then having disassembled her way through the walls creating an exit out of the lab down to below the jail.

Somehow Penny needs to get into another fight with the Frizz during all this. Maybe Inch High should also be with her during this fight.

Pericles also breaks off from them at the labs saying he'll deal with the robots and blazes his own path. Either sometime during this arc or near the end I want to reveal his true objective was getting back into the evidence locker and retrieving that disc fragment.

The Membranes should be with RoboDale and they go after Skarr while Dale is keeping Gameboy busy.

Dale beats Gameboy by self destructing after Giffany infects GB to make him vulnerable, the explosion topples the watch tower and Bobby takes out Chane.

Dora, Susie, Sticks, and Wall-E need to end up below the jail with Trevor who has found out the secret to the vortex buff.

Penny also needs to find RoboDale's head and rebuild him using parts from the PN MK3s and Gameboy's Nintendium casing.

Jesus [Sid Vicious] looks ugly as fuck, though I guess it could give some sort of "beautiful on the outside, ugly on the outside" vibe with Vicky.

I meant ugly on the inside, shit.

Will all the main parts be finished by the end of the year?

Well that entirely depends on how much people contribute.

I wanted to be done with part 6 two weeks ago, but it's mostly been just me writing it, and I doubt I'll be able to finish part 6 before the day after tomorrow meaning it's going into October.

How come Herny hasn't drawn for this even though it has Creepy Susie in it?

Aw man, maybe I really did rush his drawing. What do you think feels bad about him? Is it just the weird anatomy?

Maybe. If things continue like they've been lately, I think we might finish it more or less at the very start of the next year, though I think we may have more pinnacles in activity until them.

The main thing that would slow us down would be figuring out what the fuck we're doing with 7 and 8, since there's not much of a plot, just a general sense of what'll go down.

I plan to contribute more action scenes to part 7 because of how crazy I imagine working the race in with stand fights will get.

It's more on the general design of the stand rather than the anatomy. It could use more tweaks to make it look like the stand belongs to Vicky instead of a Wired Beck ripoff.

Is Part 8 even necessary? JoJolion isn't even finished yet.

I'm actually really excited for part 7 (a little because of the foreign Cred Forums characters ideia) and 8 (a little because we get to use internet Cred Forums too). But I can't really write, just think some ideias now and then.

I'll add some more things and make the Stand more vicky myself then. I just need to think of a good reference for a vicky stand.

I have some ideas for arcs in part 7, but I also have some plans for when we get to part 7 to hijack the first thread about it with several selective Doom Patrol pages, pastebin links, screencaps, and anything else I have that I know is going into that part just to make sure everything is on the table and there's a decent grasp of the characters before we get started.

I also don't know where exactly we're starting event wise in part 7. Do we have something before the race of the main characters meeting or does it actually start as the race is about to start and we just see all the prominent racers than and main characters become evident after that?

Because I'm leaning towards Yellowjacket and Jonah Hex being the main characters with Hex teaching Jack how to be a hero in the modern world, which I think will be funny.

There's also the issue of if they'll have stands at the start of the race or if they'll get them later. I'd say later, I'd like to give Y.Jack a style like [Buzz Kill] or something involving him being able to control anything with wings and a stinger and then his stand mixes with that and makes it stronger and crazier.

But those are future plans. Right now I still have a lot of part 6 left to get through (unless someone else wants to jump in and help write it), though I do hope I won't have to write the bulk of part 7 like I've had to do with part 5 (like 90% of it) and part 6 (I'll say 75% of it).
Because I didn't want to have to write this much of part after having had to write almost all of part 5.

>I just need to think of a good reference for a vicky stand
You might need to watch a few Vicky-centered episodes of FOP or browse its wiki for her costumes to get some inspiration. She uses a lot of weapons like chainsaws, flamethrowers, etc.

Also, watch a few serial killer movies, like (American) Psycho, Halloween, Nightmare on Elm Street, Friday the 13th, etc.

Jonah Hex for sure, after that killer art for him. I'm open on the second protagonist.

I think we can start with the race, probably. Just drop in backstory where it's needed. That or do what Cred Forums says, read the fucking manga, and start where the real part 7 starts.

Well, we'll get to it when we get to it.

Tomorrow (if I have time) gotta work more on which hopefully I'll get some help with.

And this is my last bump before bed.

bump to mourn for the inmates in PI not taking part in the chaos.

Bump.

morning bump

Then write a scene of it yourself to go before the cracks in the sky in PI starts sucking things up.

My writing is of little substance and entertainment.

I'm still leaning towards Jonah and Jane, with Hank Pym in place of Jane if people are really opposed to using her. I definitely think we should work Yellowjacket into the story somehow, but I'm not feeling him as a main protagonist.

Which ones are those?

Part 7 starts with Sandman being chased out from his tribe, then the press conference of Mr. Steel about the race's rules.

I recall that an early design was based on her "baby shredder" costume

I wasn't at first either, but I've warmed up to him after reading through his history, publication history, and reemergence into a starring role.

It really clicked with the impression I've been getting every time someone brings up "part 7 has the themes of heroism and identity".
But I get that people are opposed to it since he's so unknown.

I see Pym being more like a cocky rival who takes every opportunity to mess with Yellowjacket.
Like he goes to register for the race under that name, but then Pym tells him "Sorry buddy, but I've got that name copyrighted." with a shit eating grin, so Y.Jack is forced to register as just Jack (his real name is actually Vince Harley), then later they meet Samurai Jack and Y.Jack feels even more overshadowed.

What makes him so dangerous in this race is that he's a nobody, and Mr. President Nobody knows that makes him the underdog, and that underdogs often have the most bizarre things happen to them. That makes Y.Jack the most likely to get involved in Mr. Nobody's ulterior corpse part collecting motives, making him someone to keep a close eye on.

I went through the docks. I think I fixed them. People just can't stop, I guess.

All of them

Vince Harley is a crime novelist. He might've entered the race trying to get an idea for a new book.
Being a novelist, he should be aware of tropes, but the race isn't a crime novel, so it's not his area of expertise.

Valentine was able to weaponize karma in SBR.

Should Mr. Nobody be able to weaponize narrative repetition (tropes)? As long as his actions have a net positive gain, he can get away with them?
But his goal would be to overthrow whatever is in place that makes that so.

Heroes are a thing of the past by the time of our part 7 yet there's still evil and people still rise to fight it, but from Mr. Nobody's perspective it lacks the spectacle it once had.
He doesn't care about good and evil, but the two forces clashing always makes a show that stirs up the world, but now the show is behind closed doors so it isn't having as big an impact as it should have.
Meaning it's up to him to make the show a public spectacle again.

This is just me rambling trying to come up with something for part 7.

Bump I suppose.

Thanks Taffy

Way too fast since it takes less than 30 minutes to be all the way down to page 8 and only an hour+20 minutes to fall off the board.

Yeah. What is going on? New show?

More like LOTS of talk about CN ending stuff.

Well that's the idea, make the vortex spin the other way so all that energy flows back into PI and overloads it.

It won't still be STAR energy at that point since it'll have been used to make things, so it won't super charge the Warden.

It should go something like
>Fight the Warden
>Shirley shuts down supermax
>Dredd hits the Warden with a STAR drain shot
>Warden can no longer control his stand as the vortex reverses
>boom

Sorry, I have a bad habit of rewriting my posts if they get too shitty. Here's 86620158

Maybe Dora needs to think of a way to make the Warden be caught on a trail of footprints that make him walk in the opposite direction of the vortex's rotation. The unflow of Star energy would start accumulating in him in such a way that he starts getting fucked up by energy accumulation, like catching on fire and at some point, literally crapping his pants.

If this happens, Dora might even get to deliver a "Can you say 'Soy un Caganer'" to Warden.

I'm going to add some small suggestions in some parts of Waifu Ocean. Though none of them are really major.

I didn't fully get what was Vicky's objective when she had an epiphany, it was just to make Dora's allies stop attacking from above, right?
>Vicky looks unamused, but then the anger in her head fades away a little and the gears in her head start turning thanks to Joy’s MIXED EMOTIONS ability
>(That's it! I have an ideia to MAKE those cowards come down here)
>She turns her gaze over to Summer and Pericles “Fine, if you’re not coming down, I’ll just go after your little friend.”
>Pericles is now using steel beams trying to bind Summer’s arms and legs with them, but all it’s doing is slowing her down a little
>Vicky: “You twerps sure are a total joykiller!”. She procceds to brandish a huge axe on her hands in a way similar to "7th Stand User"'s Joykiller Stand.

Can't believe we didn't get to reference Sunny D with Joy.
>Dora: “Time to run.”
>As Dora and companions run away, Joy whispers to Vicky, "Look who's the weakling now, bitch. Guess I'll put you to enjoy some of my Sunny D dildos later."
>Vicky starts to chase Dora as Joy rides on her Stand while [Sweet Emotion] showns a disapproving look on an small panel.

Better add some more Inside Out thematic to Joy so she feels more Joyish, plus also mention that Stick's Stand is what caused Vicky to be so fastly mind controlled
>Joy gulps
>Vicky: “No…”
>Joy looks over her shoulder with some relief to see Vicky back up and about
>Joy: "Ha! My [Sweet-E] has total control over Vicky now. Get ready, you creep-"
>Vicky: “She messed with my mind… SHE’S MINE!”
>Joy’s look of triumph turns to panic
>Joy: "Oh no, guess the lead emotion is definitely Anger on this one"
>(Shit, I was too carried away to notice the badger's Stand effects faded out before [Sweet-E] took her over for good)

When Dora and Sticks were up on the cliff, Vicky had no means by which to capture them. She could scale the cliff, but with Dora's ability they'd easily be able to evade her on it.

The epiphany Joy's MIXED EMOTIONS gave her was to go after Pericles to make them come down and fight her.

I don't know what this Sunny D dildo is.
I've never seen Inside-Out. I made that clear many times back when Joy first appeared in the part.

>>Joy: "Ha! My [Sweet-E] has total control over Vicky now. Get ready, you creep-"
No, that won't work. By that time [Sweet-E] was already out to Vicky's mind and Joy knows this because it's her stand. Joy's assumption here is that Vicky has regained her senses and is still on her side like she was before Joy had to take control.

Sticks took her stand back before Joy ever took control.

I'm actually losing confidence in writing this at this point since I don't think I'm doing a good enough job conveying the cause and effect, but whatever. I know damn well at this point no one else is going to step up.
>Dora’s group enters the psych ward; RoboDale has been on guard, so no monsters have managed to get in yet
>They barricade the door behind them with everything they have and then some with Susie turning it to flesh for good measure before going deeper in to Membrane’s lab
>In Membrane’s lab, Professor Membrane is deeply absorbed in his work at the moment drawing up some kind of blueprint for super robots; Gaz is sitting on her bag in the corner playing her hand held device waiting for her dad to notice her
>Everyone else enters and the commotion finally makes him look up
>Membrane: “This is a place of SCIENCE, what are you all doing making such a-“
>Membrane notices Gaz who points to Wall-E
>Wall-E waves, Membrane looks confused, but happy as he walks over to greet his daughter and also confirm that this really is Wall-E
>Membrane: “What is going on?”
>Bobby: “Trevor and Penny are still working out this STAR vortex thing. We need to hold out until they contact us. Then-“
>Membrane: “Who what now?”
>Gaz: “Dad, the Warden has gone insane and is warping reality. Interpol is recruiting prisoners and Strickland staff trying to stop him.”
>Inch High is standing on top of a desk looking at the blueprints for the JS-bots “So you’re the guy who made those jawbreaker bots; what’d he promise you for them?”
>Membrane: “He… said they were for science.”
>Gaz rolls her eyes, but before they can continue this conversation there’s an banging in the distance, someone is working on getting into the psych ward

>Outside of the psych ward we see Skarr holding a megaphone

OK, so what's Skarr have to say? Surrender? "You are guilty of" blah blah blah? "You are suspect of conspiracy against the warden."?

Ok, I just wanted that to be clearer in the story.

Sunny D is a meme that used to happen in the Inside Out threads. It felt like a waste to not include something so Cred Forums. Also, the movie is pretty great if you understand the allegories and the psychology lore, I recommend it.

Oh. Yeah, that makes sense. I'd say Joy would've hoped that Vicky was already completely emotionally corrupted by her Stand, but Joy should've know that didn't happen considering her Stand was merely controling Vicky.

So it was a thing to give Joy a Sunny D strap-on dick?

Was there an Inside-Out Sunny D promotional commercial or something?

Still need to catch up, I'll try to help when I get there.

Nope, people just thought it fit. Just a dumb meme as always. that's what I think at least.

I like that dynamic, but I think it could still be done with Pym as the Brojo and Jack as the rival.
You end up sympathising with Jack more than with Pym, which just helps when he warms up to Jack.

I just don't care for Pym since he's too famous to work as the real main character of the part when "obscurity" is supposed to be a big issue here.

「Shake It Like a Seizure」

Seems too overpowered.

Also, tweak 「NUMP」a bit. Maybe tone down the Infinite range.

How about 7 Miles instead?

The meme was that Joy was a futa and Sunny D was a euphemism for her cock, hence the photoshopped bottles.

I miss those threads.

Obscurity's one part, yeah, but isn't that just as an element of a larger theme of identity?
I'm just really not feeling Jack as the main hero. I know we'd like obscure, but he's a bit too obscure.

>cup
That's a pie.

So is this suppose to be only Cred Forums-related shit?

Ooo! I like it!

10/10 would enjoy seeing [LOSS]'s effect.

Good shit, would love to see.

We made a few exceptions, especially at the start, but generally yes.

And I think Antman is too famous to work as the main character.

So I don't think we're going to agree.

I can at least spin Jack as a novelist having entered the race because he wants to interview Hex for a book he's writing and tries to be a hero to impress him so Hex will talk to him.

Membrane's re-meeting with Gaz and Wall-E feels too dry. Also, his speech about the JS-bots needs to be buffed or re-written, he sounds like a naive little kid when Inch confronts him about the robots.

I'll see what I can add up in this scene later. I'm not really satisfied with it, so don't mind if I change some things there.

Oh well, too bad.

Since Part 7 is coming pretty soon, I decided to color my sketch of [ENJOY YOURSELF] and Big Skeleton.

Just a small question, it's SJ or JS robot? I've seen both.

Also, I think it would be very stupid of Penny not telling Membrane beforehand he was being duped to the Warden to buff the vortex. Sounds a complete lack of strategy from a character that is been established as a genius not informing the scientist responsible for the creation of the JS-bots that they are connected with the vortex's buffing.

>in before "but he is a scientist that only pays attention for his own business and is too busy"

Still sounds stupid from her, as well from Trevor and Bobby, not warning Membrane about their plans before they burst into his lab. He is a member of the Strickland crew after all.

Go ahead, the whole thing feels weak to me since I just didn't want to write another scene where another character needs to have all the shit happening explained to them.

It should be Stand Jawbreaker Robot.

Is Membrane a member of the Strickland Foundation? Because it wasn't established if he or Von Drake were with Strickland.

I find it hard to believe they are since they would have damn well been in the know about stands and not been believing they were mental conditions.

I really don't think Membrane or Von Dark were in Strickland.

I feel like Jack/Yellowjacket would work more as a Sandman style character who's in the race for his own reasons. Like maybe the opening chapter of the part deals with him entering the race like with Sandman in SBR.

Obscurity is an aspect of the identity theme and is being used for some characters, but everyone was so obsessed with it that it most suggestions for a main character were shot down. Struggling with identity and being a hero are the core aspects of Pym's character so he's too good to pass up. The only suggestion I'm not really feeling is Jonah, but that's just me.
What I'm really looking forward to is doing the SBR style flashbacks which can add more dynamics to the characters and further explore their motivation.

In other thread someone said this "The Warden didn't tell the Strickland boys about his plans" and that line was about a question of Membrane being aware or not why he was being ordered to use Jawbreakers in the robots.

And even if he wasn't it, it would be still stupid of Penny or Trevor not telling him what was the Warden's true intentions of ordering those robots, since they are connected to him.

I got bored, so I decided to fill up some of the labyrinth part:

>While the second group continues advancing through the labyrinth, the short Gross sister, Gina, glares at the back of Mirage’s head with hatred.
>Gina (internally): “From all the inmates in this fucking place, I had to be paired with this bitch…”
> There is a flashback of when the Gross Sisters first arrived in the jail. “None of the shrimps in this place were a match for us three” There is small montage of the sisters using their Stands to harass the inmates without Stands.
>Gina: “And even those who had the same abilities than us got their asses kicked” Another scene shows the strongfat sister getting into a fight with a Stand user, only to be ambushed by the other sisters. “We were at the top of the food chain in this place! But then…” she looks at Di Lung.
>There is another flashback that shows the sisters ganging up on Di Lung in the cafeteria. He is lying on the floor.
>Di Lung: “when my uncle hears about this, you will regret it”
>Nubia (the lanky sister): “Oh, da poor boy is gonna cry to his uncle, whatcha gonna do? Ask him to protect you?”
>Di Lung is smiling, unbeknown to them; Daolon Wong was watching the whole affair from the other end of the cafeteria.
>That night, the sisters were exiting from the labor camp and going to their cell when Di Lung appeared on the other end of the hall.
>Olay (the strongfat one): “You again, are you looking for round two or what?”
>Di Lung just laughs at them “Ya fools”
>Nubia: “Say, did you go with your uncle and told him about those mean bullies following You?”
>???: “As a matter of fact, he did”
>The three turn around and see Wong standing behind them
>Gina: “Whoa, you sent your grandpa to fight for you, really scary”
>The sisters surround Wong and start walking in circles around him
>Nubia: “So, you tried to set up an ambush between you and old bones here, why you thought this could work?”

cont.

Well someone else can write the scene then since there's too much exposition going on with the same information over and over again.

It's to the point where I just want to hand wave it so it's explained off panel to whoever needs to know now.

Hell, let's just change it so that Membrane is working on something for the heroes of the group when they enter his lab and his shock comes that shit is going down much sooner than he calculated stating the Warden must've found some accelerate to speed up the energy assimilating process.

The only things I ever see talked about in regards to Pym around here are that he is bi-polar and jokes about him being a wife beater.

I do think it'd be nice to open part 7 with Yellowjacket even if he's not the main character. He has that novelist angle so he can be our exposition guy who wants to talk to all the racers.
Give him a Rohan angle.

>Wong: “It seems that it worked”
> The Gross sisters looked around and noticed that they were now surrounded by Di Lung, Me-Mow and Mirage.
>Olay: “Sonuva…”
>Mirage: “what’s the matter? Four versus three is too unfair for you?”
>Me-Mow pulls a butterfly knife “you mess with one…”
>Back to the present, Gina resumes her narration: “And of course, after those bastards stomped us, the cowards in the prison got bold again and we become the laughing stock of this place”
>She raises her hand, now covered by her glove Stand, and places Mirage’s head between her fingers. “And as long as you and your crew are still breathing, things won't change” At the same time, Mirage starts glowing with Stand power.

>Cut to group 1. Bruttenholm reads a small notebook while leading his group, until he notices a series of missing pages. He lets out a displeased grunt “Good for nothing scoundrel…”
>Dora: “What it is now, profesor?”
>Trevor: “Bah, It’s nothing. I just remembered that one of the prisoners in the last expedition had a sudden interest in archeology and decided that he was capable of deciphering my notes about the Perfect Frame Potion”
>Me-Mow: “I feel that I will regret to ask but, what the hell is that?”
>Trevor: “A fabled alchemical concoction of Pillarmen origin, sought after Emperor Kuzco to achieve a state known as Perfect Frame or, as he called it, Perfect Groove”
>Me-Mow: “Perfect Groove, sure...” (Muttering) “Sounds like a lot of bullshit”
>Trevor: “But of course our fellow novice archeologist didn’t have the expertise in the field; the poor fool misread these glyphs and assumed that the moat surrounding this labyrinth is composed of said mythical substance, rushing to drink the darn thing”
>Dora: “Wait a second, what is this? What happened to that guy?”
cont.

Its really nice that all you are working hard on this absurdly big fanfic.

but when does it end ?

Supposedly when we finish part 8.

Currently we're still on the ending of part 6.

>Bruttenholm scratches his beard and calmly recalls the incident. “Let’s see…first he started complaining that he felt tightness in his chest and a mild heartburn, then he started to crystallize from the mouth outwards until he was a big, glowing, chunk of crystal”
>The whole group is shocked with the professor’s tale.
>Olay (the strongfat sister): “No way, so that mofo turned into a diamond and died?”
>Trevor: “Oh, no. I’m pretty sure he was still alive at that point, but then he collapsed to the ground and caused one nasty explosion. That, I’m one hundred percent sure, was lethal”
> The professor keeps camly walking through the corridor, then he stops to turn around, noticing the group is still disturbed by the prisoner’s fate, staring at the glowing liquid that flows through the borders of the corridor.
>Trevor: “Oh, please…May I suggest we resume our path?”

And that's it for now, still working on the scene where the gross sister turns into crystal and explodes.

Nice to see that's finally getting written out.

Besides adding new dialogue and changing a couple of things, I decided to move Gaz's appearance in this scene to later, since that part about her being ignored by Membrane and then only being noticed when the group arrives felt rather awkward to me. Sorry if I changed your ideas too much.

>Dora’s group enters the psych ward; RoboDale has been on guard, so no monsters have managed to get in yet
>They barricade the door behind them with everything they have and then some with Susie turning it to flesh for good measure before going deeper in to Membrane’s lab
>In Membrane’s lab, Professor Membrane is deeply absorbed in his work at the moment drawing up some kind of blueprint for super robots.
>Everyone else enters and the commotion finally makes him look up
>Membrane: “I see you already brought the rest of the group Robert, now we can proceed…”
>Membrane suddenly notices Wall-E, who waves to him. Membrane looks confused at first, but then his eyebrows rise in ecstasy (since his goggles don’t show his eyes’ expressions)
>Membrane: “So you are alive after all!”
>He rushes to pat Wall-E to confirm it is really him, and then turns to the others.
>Membrane: “What’s the status of things so far?”
>Bobby: “Trevor and Penny are still working out this STAR vortex thing. We need to hold out until they contact us.”
>Robo-Dale: “Apart from that, the whole place is being sent straight to a literal hell. More and more monsters keep appearing.”
>Membrane: “Right… I still can’t believe in most of the story about the STAR vortex, but after Bruttenholm showed me the connections between it and those horrible jawbreakers that I had to apply in the robots…! I knew there was something fishy about that project, but I didn’t have anything that could back-up my suspicions.”

cont.

So Gaz, Membrane, Pericles, and RoboDale are taking on Skarr's forces? Maybe the psych ward inmates also get lose and join in the assault.

Bobby, inch High, Dora, Susie, Sticks, and Wall-E are taking the escape route Penny made?

Wherever it lets out at, Penny and Inch High should end up in a fight with the Frizz.

From there Bobby keeps with the group trying to get them to where Trevor is. Somewhere in here Trevor needs to say it's a shame Bobby didn't get into fieldwork sooner.

Bobby hands off the group to Trevor and goes to help out and do the ball kicking thing. The group can't go with him since Trevor needs their assistance blowing a hole in the bottom of the jail so they get enough drop distance to achieve vortex buffing status.

Where is Droopy during all of this? Did Giffany give him some instructions over the radio so she could begin jumping into the PN MK3s?

>Droopy: “Professor Membrane, I hate to add even more concerns among our group, but… did you see daughter yet?”
>Membrane: -one of his goggles bulge in shock- “G-Gaz? You mean, she isn’t in the watchtower anymore?”
>Dora: “Well, yeah… after she granted us an exit from the Warden’s personal prison, she told us she was leaving. But now I have to admit I’m concerned about…”
>Gaz: -behind her- “Isn’t that sweet? You do care about me after all we went through.”
>Dora: -turning to her- “Mierda, you almost gave me a heart attack! Stop doing that!”
>The others (except Dale, Droopy and Pericles) look surprised at Gaz as Gaz gives Dora a smug smirk and she steps closer to her father. Membrane seems stunned.
>Gaz: -scratching her head- “Uh, hi dad… long time no see.”
>Membrane: “GAZ! You have no idea I’m glad you are here!”
>Gaz: “Y-yeah, me too… But I think we should reserve the happy reunions for another time, because now…”
But before she can continue there is a banging in the distance. Someone is working on getting into the psych ward.
>Gaz: “Never mind.”
>Outside of the psych ward we see Skarr holding a megaphone.
>Skarr: “Listen up, poindexters! You are keeping six prisoners with you right now, and the Warden demands that you dispatch them immediately in case you don’t want to be labeled as criminals too! I was also notified that two guards that went rogue are with you, so I demand that they are sent along with the prisoners so they can be punished with the according protocol!”
>Robo-Dale: “Unbelievable. The prison is falling apart and he still plays the loyal officer’s role. What a nerd.”

cont.

>Skarr: “You have 5 minutes to comply! If you refuse to obey, I’ll send the Neo Propane Nightmares, and I will hold no responsibility of what they will do with your pathetic bodies!”
>Bobby: -gritting his teeth in anger- “That is great, as if we didn’t have already the monsters to worry about.”
>Membrane: “Neo Propane Nightmares, he said? I read a file about them, and… Yes, I don’t think we have anything to worry about then.”
>Bobby: -looking confused- “Yeah, what about it?”
>Membrane: -cracking his knuckles, a Stand aura suddenly glows in him- “Hehe, well let’s just say Officer Skarr is in for a surprise. And it is about to time to make up for my mistake for trusting in the Warden so blindly until now.”

I think that fight with Skarr can start here. Feel free to point anything that should be modified or arranged.

Yeah, it's fine.

Few grammar things, but we'll fix those once it's on the doc.

At what point should Penny make her entrance into the lab?
The "tunnel" she made should probably let out into the bus depot.

Yeah, sounds good.

Wouldn't PI eventually spill out into the real world since The Warden's stand is constantly intaking STAR energy?

How about that as more STAR energy is absorbed, Warden's stand grows stronger yet more unstable which causes a ripple effect on the world of PI that it slowly merges into the real world, and causes all manners of chaos and hellbeasts to break loose, eating out the weaker inmates and getting tamed by the stronger ones?

I meant that they or the shit that will go down with the hellbeasts won't be shown in this arc or the rest of the part.

Thanks again

I would like to apologise for the size of the pics, I sent those by phone so I had no ideia they would be this big

I would post them myself but I got confused with the old Booru with all the "down with CIS" shirts and gore/porn

Should we change the first person Dora meets upon arriving at the prison to Skarr?

Right now it's just some no name guy who she gives the fake name too.

You mean, at the very start of Part 6?

Yes, the first prison staff person Dora meets and actually says words to after getting off of the bus.

>Skarr looks at his watch, “Time’s up. Neo Nightmares, forward march!”
>The robots begin ripping away at the walls around the entrance to the psych ward before the entire wall detonates, sending debris and dust everywhere
>Skarr is coughing and waving a hand to clear the dust, he can see a shape standing in the entrance now: Robo-Dale
>Skarr: “Mr. Gribble, unless you are here to hand over the fugitives then I suggest you surrender quietly.”
>RoboDale takes a drag on his cigarette, “’friad that’s not gonna happen, Scarface.”
>RoboDale flicks the cigarette into the mass of Neo Nightmares now chagrining him, it ignites the propane he had been spreading in a large explosion
>The Neo Nightmares quickly recover, but the ground does not (each level of the prison has an out cropping ring of a platform that you stand on before going into the blocks from the center, if that makes any sense without a picture aide)
>Skarr retreats to where the ground is now stable; the entrance to the psych ward now has a large gap right in front of it making entry difficult
>RoboDale continues to stand there, taking a drag on another cigarette
>Skarr signals to the machines to advance again, now they are crawling on the walls, the coils on their backs are buzzing to life to begin their electrical assault
>Right as the bolts are about to hit Dale, they change direction and veer around him, heading towards Membrane who is glowing with stand power and has his [Smooth Operator] out
>The Neo Nightmares who weren’t chagrining up pounce from the walls to the opening only to collide with a force field coming from Membrane’s stand’s hands
>The robots are drained of their power and the force field grows, bouncing them off of it
>Skarr frowns and begins glowing with stand power himself
cont.

>Up on the watch tower, Chane has been observing this; Gameboy is behind him
>Chane points in that direction and Gameboy puts on his rape face as he bounces off of the tower

>RoboDale’s offense and Membranes defense are proving impenetrable to the Neo Nightmares
>Gameboy smashes into the wall above them causing them to step back to avoid the rubble
>Gameboy can float in midair so the lack of a foothold is not a problem for him; he points at RoboDale with a ‘Tonight, you.’ look on his screen.
>RoboDale flicks away his cigarette “Step back a sec doc, this is gonna get dangerous.”
>Gameboy brings out the drills and buzz saws; RoboDale activates his Alamo Launcher and fires off a few rounds which Gameboy deflects, quickly closing the gap between them
>RoboDale leaps onto Gameboy and jams sand into the openings in Gameboy’s outer casing where the tools are protruding from
>This disorientates Gameboy long enough for RoboDale to force him down through the hole and to the next floor down so they’re not endangering Membrane

>Skarr is now glowing with stand power as a bulky humanoid form with canons in its shoulders takes form behind him
>It grabs the inert Neo Nightmares and molds them into floating tanks that begins firing at Membrane’s force field
>These are not electrically charged shots, so each impact weakens the barrier slightly
>The tanks are now positioned directly in front of Membrane and begin firing at point blank range
>A dark figure leaps out from behind Membrane wielding a sword and slices on the shells being fired in half before handing on one of the floating tanks
>Gaz is seen standing back-to-back with her father playing her hand held game again
>As [Dark Castle] is about to do a coup de grace on the tank, it suddenly starts falling, Skarr has released control of it from his stand
>The other two tanks back off to shoot at them from a ranged distance outside of [Dark Castle]’s reach
cont.

>Skarr, thinking (Damn that girl, if she slices one of the tanks in half that my [Blitzkrieg Bob] is controlling I’ll take damage too.)

I hate it when I'm one line over the character limit.

That's where I'm at right now. Dora's group should probably be getting anxious, wanting to get in on the action.

Should Skarr go into a mental breakdown eventually like his appearances in Billy and Mandy?

ultimate power

If you can think of a good way to set that up, sure.

But otherwise he'll be beaten by more conventional means.

Does Rex Salazar will appear on part 7, someone said he will. His stand was「Harder, Better, Faster, Stronger」

I don't know, we have a bunch of ideas free floating for part 7 right now not properly connected.

Gatlocke has been brought up as being an antagonist for one arc. You can ctrl+f to find the details for that in this thread.

I don't see why not.

Reading the description of Skarr's Stand, it seems that the objects affected by the Stand grow cannons and move by themselves, the Stand doesn't reshape them into actual tanks.

>Ability: Transforms inanimate objects into tanks.

That's what it says.

>Back in the lab Dora is sitting with her arms crossed bouncing her leg
>The sounds of explosions and rumblings vibrate the lab
>Dora: “I don’t like doing nothing.”
>Bobby: “I know, I know, but we need to hang tight until we hear from Trevor. If everyone is out there fighting there will be no one to get to where we need to be when the call comes.”
>There are more rumblings from the entrance, then some sounds from another direction
>The metal plating on the back wall suddenly falls off
>Everyone in the room jumps to fighting stances, everyone with a combat stand has that stand out while Bobby stands in front of Sticks, who is aggressively holding a piece of bent metal in the shape of a boomerang
>From behind the panel two arms come up and they are then gabbed and pulled up by two coated looking Gadget shaped figures that make up [Technologic]; Penny has arrived
>Inch High was standing on Membrane’s work desk looking at the blue prints for the SJ-bots and then parkours over to her
>Penny: “Inch, good to see you again.”
>Inch High: “That’s my line; you’re a sight for sore eyes Inspector Gadget.”
>Penny puts down a hand and lifts Inch up so he can ride on her shoulder
>Penny looks around the room, “Good, you’re all still alive by the looks of it. I saw the mess out front and thought you could use a better exit.”
>As she says there though, there’s more pounding, the roof of the lab suddenly caves in and Neo Nightmares jump down
>Bobby: “Perfect timing.” He grabs his bag of props “You guys go on, I’ll hold them off.”
>Before anyone has a chance to protest, the Neo Nightmares are lifted off the ground and smashed into each other by the power of Pericles’ [Master of Puppets]
>Pericles: “I think not, good doctor, for my abilities are far better suited for this task than yours.”
>Dora, Sticks, and Susie give him a look
cont.

>Pericles: “I have no intention of dying in this place my dear kinder, but I do have some unfinished business I must attend to.” and he flies off taking the Neo Nightmares with him
>Bobby: “I’ll go after him, you guys leave. Penny, Droopy, Mr. Inch, look after the rest for me.” Bobby exits the lab after Pericles as the rest take Penny’s escape route

>Pericles flies through the Ward unlocking all of the cells, Psycho and Muzzle are now loose
>He opens Von Drake’s cell since he saw the hole in the wall there and uses it to get out into the central Panopticon without going by the Membranes
>He still has a considerable amount of metal trailing him as he exits and uses it to smash up any flying monsters who take a snap at him
>Flying over the tanks Skarr is commanding, he spins them around and makes tem fire upon each other
>Skarr grabs his arm and pain as the rest of the Neo Night mares are launched across the jail while Pericles dives down through the levels with metal chaos in his wake

>Penny’s escape route has taken them though twists and turns and finally has let out in the bus depot
>Penny: “Alright, I have another tunnel over there, it should give us a quieter route down to the excavation levels where Trevor is waiting.”
>Suddenly a light is shined on them, like a spot light, but double. Headlights.
>It’s the Frizz in her bus, she’s looking like she’s about to pin them to the wall with it
>The Frizz has a hand radio and a megaphone on top of the bus “Going somewhere kiddos? I didn’t think I’d be this lucky.” She revs the engine
>Penny begins to glow with stand power, Inch too, as she stares the bus down
>Penny: “Officer Droopy was it? Kindly escort these prisoners down to the excavation levels. Professor Bruttenholm is expecting them shortly. I have a score to settle with this woman.”
>Droopy ushers Dora, Susie, Sticks, and Wall-E over to the other tunnel Penny Pointed out earlier
>Droopy: “Do be careful, Miss.”

I was 2 characters over, so couldn't link back to the post before.

Anyway, I'm still setting up the fights.

Idea is for Pericles to head to the evidence locker, we get another scene with him later reclaiming the disc piece.

Bobby meets up with the Membranes. Skarr thinks he has them with... something. Then he gets jumped by Psycho and Muzzle. I guess he talks about the unlimited power the Warden promised him as he dies(?).

RoboDale and Gameboy's fight has taken them to new locations. While Droopy is escorting the group, those two should smash through a wall and Droopy's radio comes to life asking to be thrown at Gameboy. Dale should already be in the the process of attempting his self-destruct when this happens and Giffany infects Gameboy so that it's actually effective. Down goes the watch tower with Chane in it.

Penny VS Frizzle then happens in full (not sure how it goes down yet) with her finding RoboDale's head afterwards and rebuilding him. Bobby finds Chane in the rubble trying to get away and kicks him in the balls.

Stuff I'll probably work on tomorrow. Practicing having multiple fights going on at once and not having full follow through right away since I think part 7 will have a lot of that.

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Bump

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If need be you can always just type "they fight" and go back to it later when you're feeling it.

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I usually come up with the play by play for the fights on the fly as I get to them.

Bump

>Skarr thinks he has them with... something
A bunch of scrapped MK III bound together?

>Bobby finds Chane in the rubble trying to get away and kicks him in the balls
And after that, Mirage finish him off (dunno how she gets there though)

Probably.

Right, Mirage. Still need to get a background event of her getting out of her cell.
Easily done with RoboDale and Gameboy's fight smashing through walls.

Her cell was supposed to withstand a lot of punishment, maybe all the fighting with electric weapons causes a power outage

Maybe Giffany gets into the jail's system.

Radio gets thrown, radio gets digitized in midair, Giffany infects Gameboy, RoboDale blows up, Gameboy is dead, Giffany survived because the radio was digitized, watch tower falling reveals exposed electrical wires for her to jump into, jail's systems are now under her control.

Bump so that it's still up later when I have time for it.

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So not only are hellbeasts running rampant, but they have to deal with an a.i. getting used to running everything too? I dig it.

at least the AI is on their side now

I think she should confront the Warden at some point.

Well... she's not against the heroes anymore.

DON'T
STOP
ME
NOW

This guy was suggested for part 8, right?

Yes, he was. No idea if he still will be when we get there though.

>Scene changes back to Bobby who is running through the halls of the psych ward, he notices all the rooms are open and none of the inmates are around anymore
>He ends up behind the Membranes and whispers to them “The ward’s empty now. Did anyone go by you?”
>Membrane: “No one came out from here, but Pericles did force Skarr back a bit not long ago.”
>There are now several Neo Nightmare wrecks that have been molded into tanks floating in front of them
>Skarr is looking taxed by the number of them his stand is supporting
>Membrane: “Time to take the offensive.”
>Gaz begins hitting button combos on her hand held as Membrane drops the shield; all of Skarr’s tanks fire
>[Smooth Operator] charges [Dark Castle]’s sword as it assumes a thrusting stance, it glows with electric energy
>[Dark Castle] unleashes its Spirited Migration laser move which destroys the shells and arcs between the tanks
>Skarr takes some electrical damage before he lets the tanks drop
>The beam disperses and shocks several of the monsters inside the jail as well, but not enough to kill them
>New monsters continue to fall from the sky and begin converging on where the shot was just fired from
>Skarr is riding a giant flying jellyfish monster (Big Lenny from Spongebob) now as he recovers from the shock
>Bobby, Gaz, and Membrane are now surrounded by monsters
>Skarr: “At least die with some dignity.”
>Membrane: “I’m out of charge.”
>Gaz: “Give me a minute and I can fire off another shot.”
>Bobby begins posing “I got this.”
>As the monsters all dive towards them Bobby finishes posing and pulls a rubber chicken out of his bag of props, he then throws the rubber chicken
>All monster eyes are on the rubber chicken, all of them are scrambling to be the one to catch it; it bounces off of them as they bite and claw at each other trying to grab it
>The ones in the air begin getting blown away by the scuffle and the ones with their feet on the ground get knocked down

>The chicken is launched again, bouncing off of the watch tower before landing in Skarr’s hands
>He looks at the chicken and holds it up into the air while saying “Unlimited power!” before being promptly jumped from above my Psycho and Muzzle
>Muzzle’s [EAT IT] touches Skarr and veins begin spreading all over him; Psycho’s [PSYCHO KILLER] pulls out knives and begins carving up the jellyfish
>Both of them are laughing like maniacs as Skarr is now totally helpless, he finally drops the rubber chicken and the two of them both grab it and begin playing tug-o-war with it like two dogs wanting to play with the same toy
>Skarr is punched into the face repeatedly in their playful fight before he finally drops from his mount down several stories into the monster infested ground floor of the jail

>On Skarr’s descent, it pans over to an explosion coming from a few floors below where he’s falling from

Now for RoboDale VS Gameboy.

As long as his Stands turns objects into Hawaiian shirts I'l be fine.

>RoboDale has just gotten smashed through a wall, his Alamo Launcher is damaged and can’t fire, but RoboDale has other tricks up his sleeves
>Gameboy looks undamaged and isn’t letting up; he’s holding two very large mallets in some of his metal tubular appendages and his pummeling Dale with them
>Gameboy hits Dale hard enough with them to send him through the floor before looking down the hole with a smug look on his screen
>Gameboy descends after his current play thing, but a question mark appears on his screen as he can’t locate Dale
>The room he’s in now is the prison armory
>There’s a click noise before the room explodes, this isn’t just a propane explosion, it’s set off mostly everything in the armory
>The shockwave forces Gameboy out into the open where RoboDale is waiting with a rocket launcher “Shi-shi-shaw.”
>The rocket catches Gameboy right in the screen; RoboDale casts aside the rocket launcher and is waiting
>Gameboy emerges from the smoke unscathed and now in his angry jailbot looking form, he has blowtorches coming out of his body now
>Dale uses the gas powered grappling hook in his arm to swing away by hooking it on the watch tower; Gameboy angrily pursues him
>Dale runs across the vertical tower structure and kicks Gameboy in the back of the head forcing him further down
>Gameboy spins around and fires a canon from his chest at Dale, it connects

>Dora’s group is currently still between walls in a tunnel Penny disassembled from the various mechanical things stored inside of the prison walls
>There’s a crash in front of them and now and opening in the wall
>RoboDale has just been blasted through and Gameboy is going through the wall after him, but he stops, an exclamation point on his screen, and turns to see Dora’s group before breaking out into a sadistic grin
>Gameboy: “New players identified!” and brings out his flamethrower; there’s no room to dodge
cont.

>RoboDale then tackles Gameboy out of their way “No you don’t!”
>Dora’s group looks out the whole in time to see Gameboy rip one of RoboDale’s arms off and start slapping him with it
>Dale is not looking too good; he’s sparking in all the wrong places “Get out of here! I can at least buy you sometime!”
>Droopy begins pushing the group along again before his radio buzzes to life once more
>Giffany: “Hey, guard dog, throw me over there.”

>RoboDale is getting ripped apart now, he can’t fight back anymore
>Instead of trying to fall back, he runs forward and latches onto Gameboy who begins tearing into him with the blowtorches

>There’s a flash back of Hank visiting what's left of Dale in the hospital before he was mechanized
>Dale: "We gotta have it Hank!"
>Hank: "Have what exactly Dale?"
>Dale: "The Kill switch, in case the government ever turns against us! I bet they're in there right now. Scheming to take over corporations and use all this available power for evil!"
>Hank: "Who would go around doing a fool thing like that Dale?"
>Dale: "THE RED PEOPLE FROM UNDERGROUND!!!"
>Hank: "Dale I think all those painkillers are gettin' to your head."
>Dale: "Just promise me hank. Promise me you'll give me the option of blowin' myself up if I go to the bad side! Give me that right like a red blooded American!"
>Hank: "Dale you don't HAVE blood anymore. That's liquid propane running through your bo-"
>Dale: "PROMISE ME"
>Hank: "Ok, ok Dale. Just calm down. Your heart will stop beating if you get too excited."

>Back in the present, RoboDale is starting to glow as the power builds up inside of him
>A radio flies through the air, cables come out of it and [digitize] it mid flight before it lands near enough to the two of them
>A pink arc of electricity comes out of it and hits Gameboy right up through where his ass would be if he had one
>Virus detection warnings flash on his screen as he loses control of his ability to hover and begins spinning

>Just as they’re about to collide with the watch tower RoboDale detonates
>The explosion is huge; it destroys the base of the tower sending it toppling over to one side crashing into the prison walls
>The floor beneath it is also unstable now as it begins to crumble away in places, collapsing the solitary blocks
>Electrical wires are revealed and crackling with energy, the pink electricity moves from the radio into those
>Bobby looks on from above in shock and horror “Dang it, Mr. Gribble!” before taking off to get down there

Next is Penny and Inch High VS the Frizz. That'll be later or tomorrow.

It kinda bothers me how dead the threads are every time after a big chunk of story is posted.

Yeah. It's been generally slow today though, some days are more productive than others.

It's easier to keep going when other people are posting feedback and making suggestions.

Still have no plans for the Frizz fight despite that being up next.

Why is she even working for the Warden? So he can make a world where no one can ever die and it doesn't matter how messy the filed trips get?

Does Grandma Stuffum have Slamwitch as a Stand?

His current Stand has something to do with throwing nuggets, but that could change once we reach part 8.

yeah, I recall something like that being suggested for Frizzle's motivation.

Having a backstory for her might help in writing that fight.

Nice work Anons, the story writing is at a great pace. I can't give as much feedback as I could before, so don't be surprised if I can't do these as fast as before.

I think Membrane and Bobby should've been sillier and more in character to keep their interactions interesting. Same goes for the other characters, but I felt they needed to be the ones with more comic relief. It is also important to keep it Jojo-like, but I think you guys already fill it eith that.

Also, I know it should feel like a mess, but it is kinda hard to pass through all that detailed text about lots of things happening. Not that there's much to do about that since it is kinda important to write out that. The part was great though.


Loving the fact that monsters are actually from other cartoons, we should have more of that instead of the average Warden monster thing.

Pretty good.

I think I would like the action scenes better if they were simpler and more cartoonish. That might just be my taste in reading though. They are really good, but just a little tiresome is all.

Also, the RoboDale explosion moment was perfect. Keep it up, Anons.

Character interactions in the middle of fights is always something I've been very poor at.

When writing a fight I try to do it as fast as possible since I'm a firm believer that fights are, more often than not, quick.
I want fights to feel fast paced since that's how fights often are. They last only minutes and I don't view talking as a free action during them.

Though if someone else wants to add in some dialogue, by all means. This is a group project after all.

I just don't have the comedic timing that our parts 1 and 2 writers have.

I'm probably going to need a lot of help once we get to the final battle.

After the Frizz fight and Penny finding RoboDale's head and rebuilding him using parts from the destroyed Neo Nightmares and Gameboy.

After all that, Dora's group should arrive at the top most buried jails. Droopy, his mission accomplished, pops away to begin fighting the Warden.

This is where things get sketchy since the only current idea for tapping into the vortex's power is to drop a distance at a certain speed while being in the center of it.
I don't know if that's good enough.

Why hasn't Trevor done it himself yet? Does only Dora get the boost if it's that simple?
Did he need [Boots] to get them up on the ceiling so that they'd reach the required height to achieve the needed speed before hitting the frogman level?

I though only Dora could do it because her Stand's ability basically is the only thing that could make the Warden fucks himself by walking against the vortex plan work.

Like, it feels like Dora's power was pottery since the start for me.

I think you need to explain how things are going to happen to me.

Which things? All things?
Because that'd take probably as long as it would to actually write the story out.

What things in particular?

But I can see Trevor coming up with a plan like that, he's smart, it could work as justification for why he hasn't gone and boosted his stand himself.

I mean, how and why is Dora going to absorb the energy of the Vortex? Is this what is going to boost [Boots] into upping his powers? What is Trevor's role in this and how come Trevor could've done that way before?

Just those two, I think.

OK. Let's start with the why.

So the vortex passively buffs a stand's developmental potential without the user needing to be aware of the vortex.

Currently the Warden has two huge buffs going for him; the first is the vortex, I'm going to say tapping into it the proper way boosts a stand's abilities in every category.
Let's say before setting up his prison and tapping into the vortex, the world within [Pure Imagination] was only about the size of a large room. With the vortex it expands into a football field.

The Warden's second buff comes from all the stand users inside of PI who he is leaching STAR energy off of, that expands the world of PI even more to its 2KM radius it is at present. He's taking it to the next level now that he has enough STAR energy and is attempting to merge the world inside his stand with reality.

Dora needs that buff just to be strong enough to even get near him now.

I like the idea that Trevor figured Dora's stand would be a good counter to the vortex buff since her getting the boost might make it so she can get things moving on her paths fast enough to reverse the spin.

Trevor JUST figured out how to tap into the vortex and he and Penny thought up the plan to have Dora reverse the vortex spin, so that's why she needs to get the buff and why they're going through all this trouble to make it happen.

That's the why, the how is what's being debated.

Remember that episode of Courage the Cowardly Dog where he throws a baby Muriel out of a plan into a tornado to re-age her? Same basic principle. Fall at a high enough speed while in the center of the vortex and you get the buff until you leave the vortex.

That's what I think is going on right now.

That's cool. I think we might get another Dora flashback (maybe about her time with Swiper and how she was like before the prison, maybe she knew some other educative-cartoon characters in the way) when she gets the Boots boost, like you guys did when Dora first summoned [Boots], just a little shorter.

I'm going to think about the how now.

Well at the very start Dora's smuggling operation was made up of other characters from the show she's from.

We didn't elaborate on what happened to them.

Last bump before bed

Adding on, the vortex does not give a stand remastered tier bullshit powers.

With Dora it'll make it so [Boots] can leave red footprints ANYWHERE, even in midair. So Dora can run through the air by following a trail left by [Boots]. The speed at which they are followed should also increase.

And the blue footprints should also get a power boost to have bigger bangs.

Urgent Bump

For that guy who wanted to use SNOW HALATION for part 8, the day we'd dreaded has come.

what?

I'm hip with that. Use some pseudoscience "the sheer amount of STAR makes everything a surface" or something.

We should make more drawbacks to canon Dora's adventures.

Also, I was thinking about what if Boots existed even before he was a Stand, like a character she made up, a chimp she met once, a aztec god she once discovered or a actual long lost imaginary friend.

So, I someone wanted to start working on an idea for a side story, how would they do it? Just throw out what they've got, and if other anons like continue?

Well if anyone wants to expand the very first opening part of Dora having flashbacks on the bus ride to prison, they can.

Yes. Like we did with Heart of Melody. Though we're currently trying to finish Part 6, so we need to focus on writing that. We can help by keeping the side story consistent with the main plot and answering questions if you ask.

Pretty much. You'll probably be writing it mostly yourself since our "main" writers focus on the main plot, but we'll help you keep things in line with canon.

Also, drew La Cucaracha Act 2. Need to get some more art in here.

He's so...handsome.

Humanoid stands, man. That said I had an idea for the main [CAROLINA] that's more monstrous. I'll get around to sketching it up at some point.

Alright, thanks. My idea wasn't so much a separate story as a collection of short stories following the various characters from Part 4 called "More Stories About Buildings and Food". Basically it just makes use of characters that didn't show up as much like Billy and Mandy, or team ups of characters that didn't meet much. And it would also make use of some of the unused characters.
I really liked Part 4 and I think I'd be fun to write more of the setting because it's such a crazy noisy bizarre town where anything can happen.
But the main focus is Part 6 write now, so I'll try to contribute to it when I can. Since I'm Jorge and I like writing.

Now talking about more art.

I felt inspired to do a despiction of one of my favorite parts in Part 6. Only thing is that I don't know if HARDAC is supposed to work as some kind of projector.

Also, do you guys think we should make the despictions and Cred ForumsCo/ altogether less serious and more bizarre/parodic? I can see we taking the more fun-oriented than usual route in Cocolion, especifically.

That sounds interesting, Writefriend. We just need you to post the doc link, so we can put it in the OP. Also I do remember you, Jorge.

I think 7 might get heavy a few times depending on what sub-plots we keep around, but as a whole Cred Forumsco/ is generally fairly light hearted. We know what we are.

Looks beautiful.

Judging by the characters that are already in Cocolion, it can be done less serious. Considering that it is about internet aspect of Cred Forumsco/.

I do have a stupid idea for cocolion. Why should Fist of the b0rf star have only a minor recognition? Let's have Jon or Garfield as the neutral party in the battle between our Heroes, Ethan's Church and Scope Men.. If not, I guess they can go to Cred Forumsrge Cred Forumsstar. Just my 2 cents anyway.

We leave b0rf star alone because we know we can't beat it. I'd say let it lie.

Alright. b0rf star will have a passing reference then.

Also, Part 7. I really want Gena on the ally side. Can still be killed, still has the train stand, still can be derailed.

I think the machine just shoots a beam through the person's head and gives read out data on printed paper.

The stuff the person getting hit by the beam sees is purely inside their minds.

alrighty
docs.google.com/document/d/16C58D-OHgdjjtuX_Bhyv_TSv0mGcASsbyTwcclPaK8A/edit

Still open to suggestions for Penny VS the Frizz round 2.

Does the Frizz try to force Penny onto the bus again?

What's stopping Penny from just ripping the bus apart from the outside?

Great, I have some ideias of mine that I've been thinking lately and maybe you could use some of them.

I was thinking of including the characters of the webcomic Monster Purse somewhere mainly because the relantioship the kids have with the monsters is very Stand-like. I thought they'd fit perfectly as removed Stands cameos in Part4's [Hotel California].

I mean, in the actual comic, the kids unwillingly create these monsters and most of the time they just wish things were normal, it fits.

Also, I would like to have a story a little more focused on the residents of Hotel California too, it feels to me that the characters used there were underused. I would write it myself if only I could write well.

Yep, Frizz is doing this for the Warden just so she can be free to teach kids as she likes. There was some backstory about her being fired for using her Stand on her classes or because of an accident in one of her classes.

We could have Penny break down the bus with [Technologic] just so Frizzle reveals that she can infuse her Stand with any kind of locomotive device.

Maybe she keeps jumping from device to device while [Technologic] keeps destroying them until she jumps on a nearby Warden monster or something as silly/bizarre that could counter [Technologic]'s ability.

Well they are in the bus depot, so there are other buses available.

Something stupid and crazy... does the Warden have any Dr. Seuss-tier bullshit machines just laying around?

>What's stopping Penny from just ripping the bus apart from the outside?
「Get it Hot」's humanoid form? Penny could pretend getting run over by the bus to dismantle its axles

I was searching for the thread with her backstory, but no luck so far

Alright, so the Frizz is trying to run Penny down.

Penny is trying to use [Technologic] to pummel the bus so it'll fall apart, but the humanoid stand merged with it keeps sticking arms and lets out to block her punches.

Maybe Penny should disassemble one of the other vehicles in the depot and make it into some small personal gofast thing.

What should Inch High be doing during all of this?

Maybe he's sabotaging all the other vehicles in the depot since Penny thinks the Frizz will try to change vehicle if the bus her stand is currently merged with gets too badly damaged?

Does the Frizz take damage if the bus takes damage or only if the humanoid form that pops up from it takes damage?

Because I imagine that thing as if it were swimming in bus as if the bus were made of water and takes on the properties of water every time it surfaces.

Also, we never discussed the Frizz's backstory.

It was just "yeah, something like that" with no detailed in-depth deliberation of exploration.

I feel that she receives damage only when the humanoid form gets attacked

Alright, so the fight becomes drawing that thing out.

How should Penny beat the Frizz? What's the more interesting method?
-Ripping apart the bus
-Having Inch High sabotage all the other vehicles in the depot so the Frizz falls into their trap when switching vehicles
-Frizz gets in a Dr. Seuss bullshit mobile and Penny has to fight that (too similar to Gameboy I feel)
-Somehow pull the Frizz's stand out of the bus and beat the shit out of it

I think mixing the first and fourth options should be fine

Thread needs a bump, I've got less than one hour to work on this fight and have only just sat down to make some progress. Let's do this.

>A bus smashes through one of the walls; Penny looks to have been hit by it and has been sent flying, blood shown streaming from her face

>Rewind the clock a bit. Dora’s group has just left the depot and Penny is facing down the Frizz

>Inch High: “You got a plan?”
>Penny: “Yeah.” The Frizz puts the petal to the metal and aims to run her down “Dodge!” Penny rolls out of the way just in time to avoid becoming wall splatter
>The Frizz does some fancy maneuvering with the stick shift and turns in a way to tip the bus so that two of the wheels are on the wall to avoid a crash and also so that the bus is poised to come down on Penny like a belly flop diver
>Penny summons [Technologic] and they begin rapid fire punching at the exposed under side of the bus
>Each punch is defected by legs coming out of it attached to [Get it Hot]’s humanoid form (which is merged with the bus) doing rapid kicks
>Penny rolls for cover once more while one of her half-pint punch ghosts continues to trade blows with [Get it Hot], the other one is with her and lands a solid hit on the side of the bus, removing some of the metal paneling
>The Frizz grits her teeth as the bus gets all four tires back on the floor and spins the wheel some so the bus goes into a fast spin like a propeller “One free hit is all you get, kiddo!”
>Penny can’t dodge this so she has [Technologic] hit the bus to slow it down; once again their fists are caught by the humanoid form coming out of it
>Before Penny’s other half-pint punch ghost can start working its magic, humanoid [Get it Hot] pulls the one it has the fists of to the bus as its arms re-submerge into the frame so that it has the range needed to kick the second one
>The kick sends Penny flying along with her stand; she rolls as she hits the ground
Penny, thinking: (Her stand is merged with the bus and I can only ever see parts of it. So that means it’s bound to the bus giving her a severely limited range. I need to attack from a distance.)
cont.

>The bus is already speeding towards her before she’s back on her feet, she decides to try something risky goes flat on the ground right before it’s about to hit her so she’s under the bus for a second, [Technologic] punches one of the tires
>Success, the tire bursts and Penny manages to not get flattened
>The bus skids out a little, but the tire looks like it’s limping instead of rolling flat (Remember when the toon car in Who Framed Roger Rabbit? went skidding through the dip and he had to walk gingerly on his tires afterwards? Like that)
>The humanoid [Get it Hot] appears from the frame again and blows into the tire, refilling it
>The Frizz looks around for Penny, but she seems to have vanished “I wonder where she could be hiding?”
>Another of the buses in the depot comes to life and begins speeding at the Frizz’s bus
>Frizz: “Oh please, there’s no way you can out drive me!”
>She engages in a game of chicken with the new bus, both pick up speed as they go barreling tward each other, the Frizz isn’t stopping; she looks excited, manic almost as she grips the steering wheel
>It becomes apparent that this bus is not going to stop and once again [Get it Hot] comes from the grill of the bus to punch the second bus before it can impact the Frizz’s bus
>While that’s happening, a third bus comes to life and T-bones the Frizz’s bus
>The Frizz is shocked “What?!”
>Scene cuts to Penny who is hiding in the vents above the depot, she has a mini laptop/smart phone/tech whatever open and had rigged both buses with remote controls created using [Technologic]

>The Frizz’s bus is now getting rammed from two fronts and [Get it Hot] could only block one of them and is stuck blocking the one that hit head one so that its user won’t be harmed
>Penny drops down on top of the bus and has [Technologic] begin ripping apart the front of it while the Frizz’s stand is busy
>Frizz: “What a bright young girl, too bad she forgot I could do this.”
>[Get it Hot]’s ability activates and the bus in front of it warps around it, freeing her stand to attack Penny
>Once again Penny finds herself on the windshield of the bus, [Get it Hot] aims to knock her into the buss so that Penny will become trapped in another game of trivia
>This time however, Penny has another trick up her sleeve; she throws something into the bus through an opening up top
>The Frizz turns her head around; it’s a smoke bomb
>The bus quickly fills with smoke; nothing can be seen of the interior through the windshield
>Penny: “I figured your stand out. You can only use it to attack so long as it’s bound to your bus and your [Paradise City] only activates when you have a passenger
>The Frizz is coughing and tries to hit the breaks to fling Penny off
>When she takes her foot off the foot shaped gas petal to stomps on the breaks, nothing happens
>Penny has a cunning look on her face

>There’s a flashback to the first time she hit the bus and removed some of the metal exterior
>Inch High jumped in from there and began working his way through the interior until he found the breaks and cut them

>Back in the present, Penny’s [Technologic] has already gotten halfway through the engine before it finds [Get it Hot] and begins pummeling it
>The Frizz can’t steer, stop, or see and she’s taking damage now; there’s a wall coming up and no avoiding it
>Penny is about to risk jumping off, but then there’s a huge rumble in the jail (RoboDale went boom) which shakes even the speeding bus causing her to lose her footing

>No other choice now, Penny braces for impact as the bus plows through it into the central area of the jail
>As it exits through the other side into the chaos, Penny is flung from the bus and some of the debris catches her on the face drawing blood

Ended up shorter than I thought and I couldn't fit in any Frizz backstory because no one came up with any.

Might still be a bit more to this fight, but it'll have to wait until later.

Fine, bump.

I'm supposed to be sleeping right now, but lucky for you, I still can give some feedback.

The fight went well, the action flows perfectly. It was a pretty interesting concept to have a punchghost and car fight like this too, it was very creative of your part. Though we didn't get to reveal the fact that Frizzle's Stand isn't actually bound to the bus and that it can be infused in anything, I thought it would make a fine 'Oh Crap' moment for Penny.

Also, how would you like to have the Frizz's backstory then? I thought it was enough to have just a small description. How would you use it in the fight if we had it all?

How would I have used it if I had had it when I wrote the fight?

I don't know since I didn't have it nor do I have it now. It could've gone very differently if there were some motivations to play with; I don't dwell on would haves.

But the fight isn't quite over yet. Penny has smoke bombed, beaten up, and crashed the Frizz's bus, but is that really the end to the fight?
That means some last minute things could still be worked in before however it ends.
There's still room for that reveal if there's another vehicle at her disposal in the central prison.

Go to sleep now user, I know I will soon too, and the thread will probably still be around in the morning.

Here's my bump before bed.

Bump it to the stars.

Noted. I fixed and posted the final version to the booru.

Going to post an Stand suggestion now that Reviewfag's limit is up.

User: Mafalda
Stand Name: [Anthology 1] or [She Loves You] (or any Beatles song really)
Appearance: A gigantic earth Globe.
Ability:

Mafalda can use the globe as a board that maps the socio-political situation of any place she can find in her earth board, like a room, an entire country or the entire planet. The board looks like somekind of complex monopoly-chess game where all the individuals/parties are represented by colored pieces. Though their identities and motivations aren't revealed, these can be guessed by looking at their symbols, their actions or looking at the real world and seeing if they sync up. Mafalda doesn't fully understand what each symbol represents and which is who, but she can guess by investigating in the real world. The Stand works by basically channelling the STAR energy of an place into a political map.

Mafalda can use the board to know what is happening to someone by willfully targeting its piece and looking at their actions, acting like some kind of tracking machine. This can also help Mafalda to see the insides of a room she's never been before, though she can only acess rooms she knows how about.

If Mafalda expands the place she's mapping to a country or the entire planet, the board changes to be more of a territory game with all kinds of weird pieces representing stuff and flags everywhere. This makes her able to understand better the political background of the world.

User: Mafalda is a politically attuned prodigy girl that is known to deeply worry about the Cred Forumsitical problems in the world.

Role: Maybe some kind of high level politician, an investigator or some kind of secretary in Part 7. I imagine she would be trying to investigate Nobody's plan since she doesn't have the power to actually do something about it. Alternatively, she might just appear as a native character of South America.

I dunno, there is nothing fun about bending meme magic for evil purposes or going full Wounded Knee on the Scopemen

In a previous thread there was some ideas for a reference in part 8
desuarchive.org/co/thread/86028808/#86089410
desuarchive.org/co/thread/86028808/#86089784

>3rd bus
Nice touch.

I guess is today's agenda.

Seem so, there is also the part where Bobby kicks Shane's balls.

That sounds really cool.
Yeah, I was thinking about some kind of story with Madame Foster and Hotel California. Maybe it could be set before Part 4 takes place when Frankie was still there.
I also want to do more with the PPG.

Dammit, bump.

So do we want to go from the end of the Penny fight to Dora's group meeting up with Trevor, him explaining the plan, then to Penny finding RoboDale's head and rebuilding him while Bobby finds Chane and kicks him in the balls?

There'd also be a scene of Giffany getting into all of the prison's systems and letting everyone out of their cells, including Mirage.

>There'd also be a scene of Giffany getting into all of the prison's systems and letting everyone out of their cells, including Mirage
then that scene should go before Bobby and Chane meet. There was also the idea that Giffany hijacks one of the Mk III.

Mirage finishing Chane off comes after Bobby kicks him in the balls. Possibly much after and certainly when no one else is looking.

I think Chane would crawl along the floor trying to escape when the place is going critical and that's when Mirage kills him.

Giffany could hijack whatever, digitize it, and try to fight the Warden alongside Droopy only to lose somehow.

>Giffany constantly switches bodies as the Warden casually wrecks whatever machine she's in
>the whole time Droopy is telling off the Warden for lying to employees and not properly explaining PI

Dora shows up during this and the Warden is finally annoyed enough with both Droopy and Giffany to summon something from PI to deal with them while he entertains the much more interesting new challenger.

>summon something from PI
Another stand refight incoming?

Oh shit guys, Fist of the b0rf Star: Epilogue

youtube.com/watch?v=w8iNHyHVf0Y

Probably Woody so he gets the [Sunday Clothes] closure.

>Woody pops out
>sees Droopy
>"Yeah no."
>runs off

Whoa. b0rf actually transcended itself once again.

>"There's nothing I hate MORE than PARTY POOPERS! I'm going to defeat ya without even using my own atacks!"
>Warden just keeps throwing PI prisioners at them
>We get Woody, but he refuses to fight Droopy once again
>We get Clarissa's Dad, but Giffany blows him out of the arena almost instantly
>We get Joy, but she is still running from Vicky while riding a Gravity Falls eyeball bat monster
>"Geez, who could've thought even my prisioners could've been so BORING. Welp, looks like I have to do everything myself."

Also, what is Dredd doing about all this chaos?

He's lining up his shots. There have been no orders about these monsters so they're all intruders.

Anyway, working on the necessary exposition with Trevor now.

>Scene cuts to Dora’s group; they’ve just made it down the elevator to the newest of the old jails
>Trevor is there waiting for them along with a large group of Strickland employees who are taking shelter there from the carnage
>Trevor: “Ah, there you are Miss Consualez, or should I say Dora?” Dora looks a bit irate “Ah, no matter, glad you were able to join us.”
>Droopy: “I trust you can look after these three from here. I have some pressing business that I really must sort out.”
>Trevor: “Of course Officer Droopy, thank you for your assistance.”
>And with a nod Droopy vanishes by the power of his stand
>Dora: “OK, what’s this about professor? Why have us come all the way down here if it’s just another safe house?”
>Sticks: “It’s not like we’re any strangers to a fight.”
>Trevor: “Fighting the Warden as we are right now would be fruitless. Penny has informed me of the true magnitude of our situation. I fear he may very well already be unstoppable.”
>Dora, Susie, Sticks, and Wall-E all look very unimpressed and/or disappointed
>Susie: “And I zhout my role was to be ze pessimist of ze group.”
>Trevor: “I said as we are now. I have uncovered a way for us to tap into the STAR vortex that spirals up from Dinosaur Dan’s prison; it would greatly boost all our abilities just as it has done for the Warden.”
>Dora: “Yeah? So why haven’t you tapped into it yet then?”
>Trevor: “Because it would be impossible for me to fight him with my power. Not only does the Warden possess the enhancements granted from the vortex, Miss Penny’s Interpol associate informed us of his ability to leach STAR energy from those trapped within his stand.”
>Dora: “Yeah, we saw that first hand. It’s some messed up shit. What’s your point in all this?”
>Trevor: “You have a way to communicate with those inside of the facility known as Supermax, correct?”
cont.

>Susie puts a hand to her ear “Yes, ze connection remains unbroken.”
>Trevor: “Good. If your acquaintances there can shut that facility down while the Warden is engaged in combat with another vortex enhanced individual, then we may still have a chance of defeating him.”
>Dora’s group exchange looks
>Dora: “Alright, so then how do we tap into this vortex?”
>Trevor: “Not we,” he points to Dora “you.”

And from here it'll cut tot he rebuilding RoboDale and busting Chane's balls bit.

>Scene cuts back to Penny who is on the ground floor of the jail now looking at the destruction caused by RoboDale’s self-destruct
>It’s a scene all too familiar to her as an image of the alleyway her Uncle Gadget blew up in flashes through her mind
>Inch High gives her a nudge and she snaps out of it “Looks like there’s still something left.”
>They see the fried remains of Gameboy, his screen is dislodged and his insides are sizzling, but his outer casing is totally undamaged; still in his clutches is something that doesn’t match his colors: RoboDale’s severed head
>Penny’s eyes widen, Inch nudges her again “Be careful, it might still be active.”
>Penny: “I know, but he might also still be alive. I couldn’t do anything back then, but now I have the power to save him if he’s still alive.”
>Penny runs over to the two destroyed machines and quickly has [Technologic] batter away the remains of Gameboy; she picks up RoboDale’s head and begins examining it
>[Technologic] begins punching Gameboy’s remains until her finally starts to come apart
>Using these pieces Penny begins a speedy repair, first returning power to RoboDale’s head
>RoboDale’s eyes light back up, his vision is static-y, but he can see Penny quickly constructing a new body his head is now wired to, but not on top of yet
>RoboDale: “Bzzzzt, Hank, where am-? What?!”
>Penny: “Keep calm, Mr. Gribble, you’re still alive, I can rebuild you.”
>RoboDale is watching her work, “You lo-lo-look familiar…”
>Penny: “My name is Penny Gadget, we’ve never actually met before, but I know you. You were the prototype for my Uncle’s operation; the full body replacement procedure.”
>RoboDale: “John’s niece. Good man, that John.”
>Penny picks up RoboDale’s head and begins attaching him to his new body, not cased in Nintendium “There’s no need for what happened to my Uncle Gadget to happen to you.”

>Scene pans up, we see Bobby on an upper level who has been watching this who time, silently sniping any monsters who tried to get near them “Don’t scare me like that, Mr. Gribble.”
>Bobby hears a noise from behind him, some rubble stirring where the Warden’s office smashed into the interior walls of the jail
>Chane Wassanasong pulls himself out of the wreckage; he looks around and sees Bobby who sees him as well
>Chane grits his teeth and furls his brow as he tries to make himself look at least a little respectable by dusting off his torn jacket as he tries to exit the ruble

Hmm, I need something here, something Chane says or something Bobby says that finally sets Chane off. Something that makes Chane say he made a deal with the devil all so he could take everything from Bobby: the foundation his father built up, his reputation, and once the world is ruled over by the Warden, "her" as well.

Then he gets kicked in the nuts.

>Dan reappears during some kind of reunion of the Scopemen and the protags and fucks everything up for the remaining Scopemen, ending on a total fuck up for everyone involved.
lol

Nice. Will post it to the booru.

I know you just wrote that down, but I already wrote it so, there you go:

Maybe Penny mentions later how dangerous her "bus" Stand is and how Frizzle was too careless.

Frizzle would get triggered and would say something like this:

>"Don't ever repeat those words to me, you brat!"
>"Back when I was a teacher, I motherly planned every last detail of my classes' trips, even those cheesy puns from the boy with a blue-coat."
>"I was someone that could show my students the beautiful visions of the universe. I could make them able to see beyond those outdated books."
>"Hell, I even had my own show. That was all until that damn slip in the Moon. They thought my [Get It Hot] was too dangerous and I was too... careless."
>"But in the Warden's world, nobody will ever be able to die ever again. Don't you see my point, dear?"

Maybe Penny mentions how she once dreamed of being part of Frizzle's class too. I mean, she did originally look like a Magic School Bus character.

Would that be before or after rebuilding RoboDale?

Definitely before the Dale explosion. Maybe just after she makes Frizzle crash. It could work if we placed the Dale fight a little after.

Forgot to mention how it would be interesting if Frizzle could change the size of the vehicle if she was driving to an very small destination too. We could use her power of warping to any place imaginable more creatively. Like, maybe she can travel to Penny's gadgets and dismantle them from inside while she's traveling.

No, she does not warp to places.

Her stand's ability it to create direct paths to her current destination.

The crash through the wall is after the Dale explosion. I explicitly mentioned the exact time during their fight when Dale explodes.

Oh. I thought she could do something like this since she's always going to small places in the actual show.

I get it. Then maybe we could make the fight last longer before Penny finds RoboDale's head. Also, maybe the vehicle Frizzle uses may be the Unstuck-Inator from Phineas and Ferb.

In this rendition her power works like the bus from Harry Potter (best example I could think of), only she needs to set a destination before it kicks in.

She also has the secondary ability of being able to make rules that are absolute within her bus that must be followed if you answer a trivia question incorrectly. That ability was explored in full during their first fight.

>Penny: “I figured your stand out. You can only use it to attack so long as it’s bound to your bus and your [Paradise City] only activates when you have a passenger. You got too careless."
Then Easy.

What sets Chane off in the show?

I don't really remember him at all from King of the Hill aside from Kahn trying to get Connie to date him.

>He stumbles and falls again; Bobby laughs a little before stretching out a hand to help him up
>Chane merely scowls and gets up himself “Some things just never change. Still able to laugh at anything, huh, Hill?”
>Bobby: “Well if I can’t find time to laugh while the world is coming apart, when can I laugh?”

Something needs to go here. I'm just not satisfied with how the conversation gets to Chane talking about his deal with the devil.

>Chane: “Typical Hill. The foundation was practically going to be handed to you on a silver platter; I had to work to get to where I am.” Chane walks slowly around Bobby “So I made a deal, a deal with the fat Red Guy himself, so I could take everything from you.”
>Bobby just has an ‘OK’ expression on his face
>Chane: “I started with your father’s precious Strickland foundation. The joy I felt in making sure you’d never rise to the top was fleeting since you just rolled with it.”
>Chane is eyeing Bobby’s riffle now resting against the railings “No matter how far down the latter you sunk you were able to laugh it off and I had to deal with the looming prospect of answering to that fat red bastard.”
>Change grabs the gun and points it at Bobby who is still nonchalant about this “But then I got lucky! The WB got taken down and no one was left to collect on their end of the deal! I took my time taking Strickland apart one moral at a time, starting with that ridiculous propane fixation.”
>Bobby has a bit of a semi-disgusted look on his face now
>”I laid plans with the Warden to remake the world! Soon we will be as gods, and I will take immense joy in taking everything else from you. First your life, then your legacy, and even her!”
>Chane begins laughing like an idiot as he pulls the trigger
>Click
>Chane: “Ha ha ha- Huh?”
>Click, click, click
>Bobby: “The safety’s on, jackass.”
cont.

>A BOOM is heard as Bobby's foot connects with Chane’s balls which echoes over the chaos
>Several monsters wince upon hearing it and pause momentarily looking in Bobby’s direction
>Chane is on the ground now in the fetal position while holding his crotch
>Bobby: “That's MY foundation! I don't know you!”
>Bobby takes his gun back and begins walking away before pausing “Huh, Trevor always did say it was a darn shame I never got into field work. Aw well, better late than never.”

>Scene cuts to pink lightening zooming through the jail’s electrical grid
>Giffany is looking for something; she’s zooming through all of the jails systems
>She zooms past several cells, unlocking them all
>Mirage looks up from laying on her bed to see she’s now free, as do many other prisoners
>We see Dredd in the background killing monsters who then notices the prisoners have been let out and frowns even harder
>Giffany finally finds what she was looking for: Neo Nightmares that have yet to be deployed and quickly arcs into them

I think that's enough for tonight. It feels sloppy right now anyway.

>Scene changes to the Warden who is on the roof of the jail directing the chaos like a conductor
>Droopy appears behind him causing the Warden to stop, “You again?! I thought for sure throwing you into my world of [Pure Imagination] would get you off my back.”
>Droopy: “That is the exact reason why I keep trying to speak with you, sir, there’s no protocol for placing prisoners within your stand, it is a violation of Belle Reve’s bylaws.”
The Warden is flapping his hand as Droopy talks “Ugh, you sound just like Dredd sometimes, you know that? All rules and regulations, no sense of creativity. Soon the whole world will be my playground, and you insist on telling me about ‘protocols’ and ‘regulations’. How boring can you get?”
>Several Neo Nightmares come smashing up through the roof, they’re crackling with pink electrical arcs as Giffany’s face takes form
>The Warden: “Oh hi, it’s you! When did you get out of my [Pure Imagination]? I‘m starting to think no one around here is doing their jobs.”
>Giffany: “You can’t keep me locked up anymore! I’m going to be free!”

Then with some tweaks and expansions.

Need to remember to have Woody try to kill Susie, Sticks, and Wall-E while Dora is running on air, but Von Drake saves them because he wandered over and his stand nails Woody long enough for [Sunday Clothes] to get a hold of him.
Need to be friendly and apologize to sticks while still thinking he's insane now. "Sticks, my dear girl, terribly sorry for how I blew up at you last time we spoke." or something.

Last bump before bed.

Are we killing off any of the protags? I think we kind of have to kill Sticks, or else she'd interfere with Nobody's plans too much.

Just make it a random death by Warden releasing one of the prisoners from PI

Bumping it all day, all night.

Welp, I guess I can cross Sticks off the list for Heart of Melody.

Hmm...what's the status of Huey, Dewey, Louie, and Webbigail Duck?

Could be the Warden himself if he came to the conclusion that Sticks' clairvoyance is too much a threat for his plan.

they weren't mentioned during part 4 as far as I remember.

What if we use as a base

>Warden sees Sticks as a problem
>Sends out Clairissa's dad, he gets K.O'd quickly
>sends out Woody, refuses to fight
>sends out Joy riding a beast, still running from Vicky
>Joy jumps over the crew while Vicky charges ahead of them
>Sticks tries to stop Vicky by throwing her stand at her
>She gets punched into the air
>Gets impaled, smashed, burned or a combination of all three
>Vicky catches up to Joy
>Joy has the beast throw her out of the area while Vicky follows
>Warden makes a remark about lesbians

>Warden makes a remark about lesbians
kek

We could add in some philosophical topic to make Frizzle more certain of her point. I would like her to reference some philosopher, but I have no ideia who we could use.

>"Death is the ultimate motivator of all life. There would be no point in feeling pain or fear in a world without death."
>"It would be endless freedom, Penny. We could be free if we really wanted to be."

Thanks Taffy.

Also, it has been some time since Heart of Melody got updated. The plot outline seems to be complete, but some of the characters still need to be stabilished.

Maybe the powerpuff girls could be one of the Edited characters too, maybe rensponsible for the Horror Melody User troubles in Nowhere. Though I don't know how they appear in Part 4, so there's that.

No, I think I'll shoot for a happier ending. I already did protagonists die in part 5 and they're sure as hell going to die in part 7, so I think I'm going to have all of them live in part 6.

Interpol has a role to play in part 7, Sticks can be mentioned as some advisor but not be directly shown.
She wouldn't be able to predict Mr. Nobody anyway since he pulls in different versions of himself in every causality.

Also, killing Sticks would ruin the Von Drake moment.

>Jojo
>Happy Ending with no deaths

Been absent from this project since around the excavation arc of part 6.

Came back to tell you that I fucking love the new JoJo OP. It even sorta fits into what we had going on, so it reminded me of you guys.

I'm a bit sad now seeing that in hindsight we never drew the main cast + supporting characters posing while pointing at the sky.

youtube.com/watch?v=7Su0viKgV3g

Looking back, even though that part lost steam near the end, it was fun to see it through.

Jojo part 6 ended with a universe reboot so that the main character who died would be alive again.

I fail to see your point.

And my plan that was already in the works is that the re-spawn feature is already at work within the jail now, so any staff they've killed could still come back.

God that'd be retarded

>everyone lives
Not feeling it. I feel like the Warden would be going "fuck waiting" at this point and start sucking up all the STAR from people who've died, killing 'em permanently.

>Jojo part 6 ended with a universe reboot so that the main character who died would be alive again.
Those that had died by Pucci's hand didn't come back, they were brought back as different people, hence "Irene"

You know, if the range got nerfed I wouldn't mind Reality Distortion. Shake it like a seizure may or may not work, depending on context, but we'd probably just cut it completely or at least nerf it.
Sounds neat. I'm hip if the jury is.
Would work as an investigator. Might even make a good agent for Nobody.

Yeah, well I'm not feeling the whole "the Warden suddenly inexplicably notices Sticks and decides to murder her" angle.
It makes no sense at all since he's never even really interacted with her.

If anyone's dying it's gonna be Dora right before the Warden implodes, and even then I'm not sure if she'll stay dead.

>"Oh wait, I have just the things for this occasion!"
>Warden puts his hand on PI as if trying to find some specific toy in a toy bag.
>He pulls Bender and Grizzly, "There you go!"
>"Now, my hosts, do your job and I won't have to kill you permanently, 'k?"
>They're too terrified of coming back to PI so they just start hosting the fight as fast as they can

Yep, I can see he trying to do something like this near the end.

>YTP stand
Yes, I can see this happening in Cocolion. Sounds neat if we can think of some role for him.

Maybe he's part of Ethans cult? Downgrade [NUMP] to only affecting things he can see directly and maybe he could serve a similar role to the user of Tenore Sax, but with elements of Echoes and D4C...and he's in the security room of the Church so he can use the cameras to affect anywhere in the building.

Fair, but Warden doesn't have to have it out for her specifically. He could just get bored and decide to throw a bunch of PI inmates into the mix to shake things up, and Sticks dies in the chaos.

Really? Could have sworn I saw something mentioned about them in part four... probably remembering wrong.
Well, the PPG I think just showed up for one scene I believe?

Also, yes I know it's been a while since Heart of Melody last updated, having a bit of trouble figuring out how to write out the spot I'm stuck in for the rough draft. I'd open it up so everyone could edit the thing but well... I'm worried about it getting vandalized, ya know?

Also, Plot Outline is still open for suggestions in terms of events and stuff, so it's probably far from complete, as well as the TTG getting their stands figured out as well, if they all get stands anyway.

My whole problem here is that in this post I was working out a thing with Sticks an immediately after that the "kill sticks" movement began.

I get that killing people at the end of a story exists to create drama, but it's probably one of my least favorite things a story can do with a main character since then there's no time for fall out, no time for the death to be processed by the focus characters, no time for it to be anything more than just a "WHAM" moment for the sake of being a "WHAM" moment.

I was able to get behind Gadget's death in part 4 as well as Toph and Max's deaths in part 5 since those deaths actually carried weight.
But here, killing Sticks at this point in the story, there's nothing. Dora will have already gone up to the roof of the jail and will be fighting the Warden, there's no time for her to see this, there's no GOOD way for her to see this without something truly contrived being done.

The Warden does not strike me as the type to kill someone's friends just to spite them, he's not really a hostage taking kind of guy.
He'd be enjoying the fight with Dora right up until Susie gives the word to Shirley to shut down Supermax which takes away 40% of the Warden's STAR reserves and forces him to get serious.

Deaths for shock value are cheap and I'm not going to write something I don't enjoy, that just outright kills my motivation.

Maybe Squirrel Girl as a edited character too. In fact, I think she's a lot better to use, considering we need more comic characters.

Yeah. Killing Sticks at a very unneeded moment to avoid a good ending is dumb. I prefer going with the Warden rushing things out and killing a good chunk of the people of PI if we really are going to have to include some casualties in here.

Plus, the ending is not even that good considering thousands of dangerous characters are blown of Belle Reve.

Do what you must, user.

I would suggest Tyke from Tom and Jerry as one of the imprisioned kids. Even got a stand for him.

Stand: [COMING HOME] (Cinderella song)
Ability: Allows Tyke to set a mark. When activated, the mark produces a small white and red doghouse. Tyke can appear in it, essentially leaving his body behind. He cannot exit the small house, and if it breaks, he is returned back to his body. From the house, Tyke can set a different mark where doghouse can appear. Also, the house allows Tyke to shoot spiked from both sides collars that automatically attach themselves onto a target out of it. For every collar, the house looses a piece of itself.

I understand totally, and agree with the WHAM thing, but I'm thinking more long term plot. If Sticks survives the first thing she's going to do is go after Nobody again, and now that she's gotten better at using her stand she'd be more of a threat. No matter what happens she basically has to die so Nobody can be president and enact his plan in part 7, and it'd be better to do it in the final battle somewhere than "Sticks died of a bullet-induced cold" in the epilogue or as a flashback in 7.

To be brutally honest I feel that most of time you guys are too squeamish to get the main characters killed. The only part where I saw some heavy casualty was 3, and even then you got Aladdin revived.

Part 5 just had a bunch of minor characters dying, whereas the only major players to get killed were Max, Toph an Dexter.

You do realize that Sticks could've been recaptured long before she made another attempt?

Or now that she has a better grasp of her power, she can see that Nobody is truly unpredictable since every different branching path of him pulls different Nobody's from different realities, right? Nobody can't pull Big Guy Nobody into his reality since this other reality already did that, or if only her reality's Nobody has that power, then she really can't predict what he'll do next because then suddenly there's more than one Nobody and she can't focus on them.

I had an idea for the epilogue of part 6 based on that Worlds Unite crossover comic where in one issue Sticks is in police custody in an interview room or something.

She'd be in an Interpol one-way mirror room and be saying something like "Fine, I guess I could help you guys out tracking down the real dangerous crazies" referring to all the inmates who got blown all over the world at the end of part 6.

It gets her out of the way and also gives her a presence without being directly involved since we already have plans for Interpol to be very suspicious of Nobody in part 7.

I don't know if I agree with this. There's thousands of Stand users in Cred ForumsCo/, but not all of them need to go after the bad guys, some have their own bad guys too.

I don't think Sticks is going to be able of knowing about Nobody or using her powers like this again unless she goes the Penny route and becomes some kind of investigator.

We can still fix this in Part 7, which I think will be much more serious than the later parts.

We welcome you to share your ideias with us too, user. If we had more people suggesting stuff, Cred ForumsCo/ would improve a lot, you know.

Sticks was incarcerated for attempted assassination of presidential candidate Mr. Nobody.

And I found one of the pages I was looking for.
Definitely want her to be a new Interpol asset in the epilogue.

And yes, in part 7 we will need to have main characters dying.

>We can still fix this in Part 7

You can still do that in this part. Really this thing of giving a happy ending to everybody is too fluffy for something that is inspired in Jojo, where the author hardly spares his cast with the sole exception of DiU.

And personally I'm starting to feel irked with this idea of pushing Sticks to be too way relevant.

I wouldn't have brought that stuff up if it weren't for "let's just kill her for no damn reason".

Everyone just jumps to conclusions expecting anything that gets discussed to be the end-all be-all focus of everything later when really it's nothing more than a background element that wouldn't have anything more than a passing mention once in the entire story without the character in question actually showing up at all.

Seems more like you got too much attached with that particular character and didn't like that a couple of anons chose her to be the casualty out of the main cast. It is just the like the Vicky fight where some people were reluctant to add Joy into the mix because "Nope Sticks will be the one who will end that fight, no more new ideas". Not to mention her role in this whole arc is big enough - the whole psych ward stuff, using her powers to save the others from PI, using her powers to stop Vicky, etc.

And feels awkward how a Part that featured too many violent and dark elements will only have minor villains and the Warden dying whereas the protags and their allies get unscathed or with superficial damages. Feels more like One Piece than Jojo at this point.

Well, killing Sticks is probably not going to solve much and she isn't in a very deadly position anyway.

Maybe when Warden decides to genocide everything to rush his Stand's expansion, he goes on a rampage and starts to kill everything in his way. Deaths are going to be much more occasional instead of arbitrary this way.

That may include Droopy, Giffany, other random characters and even Dredd if we continue like this.

... Considering how strong Squirrel girl is normally. Sorry, but no. I want the "Edited" characters that appear in heart of melody to be ones that had their series rebooted but disliked.

Such as Teen Titans Go and Powerpuff Girls.

I'll Tyke as one of the kidnapped kids, though I'm not sure about the stand.

I'm tired at this point user.

I had to write pretty much all of part 5 and then our writefag for part 6 up and vanished so it fell to me to write this part as well. We've been on part 6 since July and I don't even remember when we started part 5.
Every new idea just adds more to what I have to write. Anons will suggest, but they will not elaborate or write the scenes themselves.

I am probably one thread away from finishing part 6, so I'm at the point were I see the ending and I'm going to start throwing shit under the bus to get there faster.

Not gonna lie, part 6 is straight up awful from the get go because it mainly features Dora the fucking explorer.

It could've been literally anything else but we went with the stupid shitty joke that's already been done a million times (DORARARA)

Wow, you are way too salty.

Considering I'm drawing part 1 I am actually pretty salty and it honestly didn't make me want to even finish at all.

Who would you have picked instead? Just curious.

Not sure myself, it could have been any single cartoon character though.

That and this project kind of took a bad turn once part 3 was being finished. It felt like all of the ideas that were pretty good in the very early threads were scrapped and we got that entire porky pig thing which felt like way too much.

Yeah the Porky thing was pretty bad, I'll admit. I think the big debate about the Eds being protagonists in 4 was another blow.

One thing you have to remember is that this entire project is basically a bunch of memes that went way too fucking far. Tom and Daffy are centerpieces of part 3 because of memes, Courage was protagonist of part 1 because his initials just so happened to match up with Cred Forumsco/, etc. It makes sense that a project based on shitty memes would use a shitty meme again for the part 6 protagonist.

>I think the big debate about the Eds being protagonists in 4 was another blow.
This took the wind out of my sails the most to be honest.

I suggested the name "Jaw is Unbreakable" and then the Eds get sidelined completely because 'already used too much in part 3' but there's no sense even complaining about it now because it wasn't changed then and it won't get rewritten.

At this point we've got the time investment fallacy where we cannot possibly end this because there's too much time put into it. I'll continue to draw part 1 and eventually it will be done but after that I honestly don't know.

Welp, I guess we need to rethink our ways until Part 7 and Part 8. So, the first thing is to use characters with more fitting roles than just randumb memes, right?

I think it was a great ideia because of how unusual and bizarre it feels like. Why can't we have it be a little fun sometimes, user? Also, Dora was handled pretty well here.

If we took this the very serious, memeless way, it would just be boring and autistic as hell.

You can have memes and fitting characters, Dora is only good for a single joke and that is exactly what I said before.

She has nothing to do with Jojo and is the furthest from any kind of Jojo content than probably any other cartoon in this entire thing.

Yeah, it's too late to stop. I've been on the sidelines for most of 4, 5, and 6, but writing Droopy vs. Woody reminded me how much fun this project could be. I think we can make 7 great, we just need to pick ourselves up and commit.
It's important to remain self aware and realize we're writing a giant parody, for sure. I have no problem with using memes because it reminds us not to take things too seriously, but it's nice if the memes fit the roles too. Take Daffy in 3, his entire motivation is based off a shit meme but he's still a surprisingly threatening villain.

Wow guys, way to be super de-motivating when I'm so close to finally getting this part done. Welp, guess I'll just keep going.
>Warden: "There's nothing I hate MORE than PARTY POOPERS! I'm going to defeat ya without even using my own attacks!"

>Inside PI at the concert, Deadlock is observing the cracks in the sky
>Twisters start descending from them, grabbing up inmates and sucking them into the sky
>Deadlock: “The time is now.”

Into the Vortex

>Scene is of Dora standing at the cusp of the hole Dan blew in the ground
>Dora: “This doesn’t feel well thought out.”
>Trevor: “To attain the power boosting effects of the vortex, one must achieve terminal velocity while falling through the center of it.”
>Dora is still peering down through all the holes made reaching into the old jails “It can’t be that simple.”
>Trevor: “But it is. The Pillarmen had far sturdier bodies than us humans, they could simply leap into the air and land. You will need to drop and use the power of your stand to keep from suffering a fatal impact.”


>The Warden is throwing PI prisoners at Droopy and Giffany now
>Woody appears, but takes on look at Droopy, salutes, and jumps into the jail himself
>Clarissa's Dad falls from the sky, but Giffany blows him out of the arena almost instantly
>Next is Joy riding a Gravity Falls eyeball bat monster, she’s still being chased by Vicky so she doesn’t even stop to look where she is before diving into the jail
>Warden: “Ugh, lesbians.”
>Giffany has been trying to attack him the whole time and Droopy is still droning on about all the laws the Warden has broken
>"Geez, who could've thought even my prisoners could've been so BORING. Welp, looks like I have to do everything myself."
>The Warden rolls up his sleeves and looks over to his would be opponents

>Back under the jail, there’s more loud boomings coming from above, the ceiling finally collapses somewhere and the Warden’s monsters begin falling in

I'm all for going back and making changes to parts. A lot of the time the writing was done just for the sake of getting it done. I think once we get near the end of the project we can go back and start making changes. Picking which character to kill off in a "finished" storywould cause a lot of problems right now.

And Part 7 should really be our chance to have a fresh start. In particular I want to try and actually figure our the characters and plot before we get gridlocked on writing dialogue.

Also
All but one of the main cast in this part should die.

>Dora turns and begins glowing with stand power
>Susie is also watching the monsters and casually pushes Dora with one arm without taking her eyes off of them “Sorry, but we just no longer have time for zhis.”
>Among their guests is also Woody
>Susie: “Oh, joy.”
>Joy also lands through the hole while riding her monsters with Vicky not far behind
>The Strickland employees are already fleeing, running down the tunnels
>Woody spots Susie and Wall-E and begins rubbing his head again, getting a crazy grin
>Sticks is trying to protect the powerless people as they flee, Joy runs through them and Vicky punts Sticks away as she tries to stop her from tearing into them
>The impact sends Sticks flying into a wall where she drops to the floor
>Trevor is trying to deflect as much of the damage caused as possible using his stand

>Dora is still falling, she’s picking up speed; the faster she goes the more sparks she can see forming in the air around her
>[Boots] is out and the sparks begin arcing as bolts through the air and through both Dora and [Boots]

>Woody has gone full crazy again and is trying to kill Susie now
>Sticks is still down, but not dead. She moves her head and looks around at all of the shit happening around her
>A familiar shadow is being cast over Sticks now, it’s Von Drake’s, he’s smiling kindly as he’s kneeled over looking at Sticks in an almost fatherly way "Sticks, my dear girl, terribly sorry for how I blew up at you last time we spoke."
>He gets her off up the ground and sits her against the wall
>As he’s doing this, more monsters are coming, but they become stuck in a big purple sparkling cloud blown by [schizophrenia]
>The entire floor is now locked in place by this cloud, no one can move
>Wall-E takes this opportunity to have [Sunday Clothes] wrap around Woody
>Vicky is still struggling and manages to cut herself free
cont.

>As she’s about to start chopping heads off, suddenly a footprint indentation appears on [Sid Vicious]’ chest, the kick was so fast they didn’t even see it before they had already been sent flying
>Vicky collides with the ceiling, she looks down and glares at Dora, but before she can mount a counter attack the footprint on her stand chest detonates in a much larger explosion then we’ve seen previously
>The ceiling where Vicky was imbedded in is destroyed and another hole opens up
>Everyone’s looking at Dora now who suddenly takes off into the air, following a trail left by [Boots] up and out of the old jail

OK, up to the roof Dora goes. Let's just have Droopy and Giffany either beaten or dead when she gets there.

You guys are too blood thirsty wanting everyone to die. I don't agree with that direction.

Going into the final battle now, Susie does need to be alive to give the order to shut down supermax at the right moment.

I'll work on this more later since you guys just make me feel depressed right now.

>I'm a bit sad now seeing that in hindsight we never drew the main cast + supporting characters posing while pointing at the sky.

You mean the Part 6 cast? I think I could use this ideia. Do you have any specific reference about those poses?

Yeah, this discussion has been a little depressing for me too. But it's a productive and long needed discussion that keeps us in check. Also, it's better than having no discussion at all.

I'm the one that does those vector arts by the way, and I just keep hearing that Part 6 is actually the weakest part of Cred ForumsCo/. I guess there's still Part 8 for me to work later.

>we got that entire porky pig thing which felt like way too much
the what? I remember that at one point there was this idea that Porky was going to be the one that finished off Daffy.

>figure our the characters and plot before we get gridlocked on writing dialogue
this, especially with part 7 since right now is just a bunch of loose ideas.

And the fact that they had to be sidelined for characters like Jay and Silent Bob, who aren't even Cred Forums-related characters, killed most of my motivation to contribute to anything to that part.

>Also, Dora was handled pretty well here.

Not really. She came out as a shallow Jotaro clone most of the time.

Her only best parts were when the writers took her out of the dull "badass stoic" mold and made her have actual reactions.

Very Nice, user. Really liking how we are pacing beetween Dora, Penny and Bobby.

Maybe Bobby says something like:
>"Good grief. You are one of the only people I met here that didn't go out-right evil on this institution. I guess you finally made yourself worthy of being in my father's foundation after all."
>The sheer optimism and trust in Bobby's words, for some reason, really turns Chane off
>Before Bobby can continue on the next room, Chane breaks the silence

This was the best. Real nice work, user.

Yes, she has a Jotaro personality, which unfortunately cuts off most of the connection with her original character and thus makes her interactions much less interesting.

BuI really dig the transformations you guys did to the character, her backstory and the elements of her show. The whole thing about the original character being so out of place is pretty funny to me.

I mean, here's a list of people who actually DO need to survive part 6:

-Deadlock and Dethklok + the stand jawbreaker powered robots inside PI (for the Church of Deadlock to be a thing later)
-Bobby to rebuild Strickland
-Penny to make sure the story gets told to the world (and also RoboDale since I'd rather rebuilding him not be pointless)
-Pericles, to foreshadow Ethan's cult as he deliveries the disc piece to a hooded person in the epilogue

Everyone else could die in the explosion at the end if we really had to kill them all. I don't care for that kind of ending, but it's not off the table.

If Bobby and Penny have been talking, then wouldn't Bobby know Chane was evil by this point? Swiper pointed the finger at Chane.

Maybe Bobby says "this institution" and he can turn it around so that he meant Chane was rotten well before then.

>Pericles, to foreshadow Ethan's cult as he deliveries the disc piece to a hooded person in the epilogue
That's gonna be in the epilogue or in a flashback in part 8? I'm trying to figure where it could fit without distracting too much from the rest of the epilogue and to not overshadow part 7 teaser.

I don't even know what's going to be in the epilogue at this point aside from the final shots being of Mr. Nobody looking at a newspaper with the big headline "MR. NOBODY PULLS AHEAD IN THE POLLS" with a much smaller article about the prison explosion somewhere below it.

He might wonder who still buys newspapers.

And Membrane, if the Scud sub-plot is still going to be used in Part 7.

I don't know what is with this character that he keeps being neglected.

Ok, so I'll fix it like this:
>The sheer optimism in Bobby's words, for some reason, really turns Chane off
>"Yea, it's just business, Hill. Don't take it too personally."
>Bobby stares Chane as he's about to exit the room and breaks the silence
>"But you were rotten way before this institution, didn't you?"
>!!!
>"Interpol told me you could've be involved in this. It really is true, isn't it, Chane? I thought you changed."

Hope it's not too cheesy. If it is, we can just make Bobby confront him as a betrayed childhood friend.

I keep forgetting about him, but yes, he builds Scud sometime before part 7.

I don't know why he'd build a robot designed for assassinations though.

I think that could work.

They were never friends when they were kids though.

Maybe he builded it during his time in Belle Reve as an easy guard robot for civilians/Warden. Then he repurposed it (obviously didn't get any of the weapon functions out because it would be a "waste of work") and maybe that's how he got into the race.

Yes, I know they weren't friends, but I think Bobby just likes to treat people he knows as friends because it eases bonding.

Thing is I think Scud is supposed to be a stand jawbreaker powered robot, and not one of the ones built in a hurry for the Warden, but one that had more planning put into his design.

I don't know if he's an actual racer or just an assassin following the racers.

I just realized
>Mafalda loses it when she sees The Beatles in the race.
>It might be one of the major reasons she got into where she is now

We should create a new thread soon

New thread is up.